Open Poetry #26 |
A Love Remembered |
quatro Member
since 2003-04-29
Posts 392Galveston, Texas |
A Love Remembered I watch her and I see so much of myself in her. I can remember like it was yesterday the excitement of being in love. I can still feel the blood rushing through my veins causing my heart to skip a beat and my face to blush. I can still feel my cheeks as they rise with laughter and ache with joy. I recall stumbling over my own words and only being able to call out his name. With every breath I took, I inhaled his very being; all his sweetness, all his charm, ...all of him. Touching him brought pure ecstasy and I would become induced in his drug. I could never have enough-- always wanting more. Everyday I would pray that the next day be better than the day before. Now I pray ...that I was her. Copyright © December 2000 |
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carol Senior Member
since 2003-01-25
Posts 624Florida USA |
quatro,good love poem Real friends celebrate in who we are and have faith in all that we can become |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
OH MY GOSH!!!!!! I love this SO much!!!! Sticking it in my private library this moment!!!!! I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
You can't imagine how this has moved me, thank you. One tiny grammatical thing at the end is changing her to she. The way you worded this made me able to get right in that place of being the owner and speaker of the feelings expressed. Into my library it goes.... |
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quatro Member
since 2003-04-29
Posts 392Galveston, Texas |
:} Thank you SOOOOO much. You don't know (I guess you do) how much your comments mean to me. I wrote this in my journal one day after noticing that my oldest teenage daughter was in love. How I remember the days. Love, Naome "quatro" |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
hi hi and welcome I have often wished the same thing the subject in this poem wishes. enjoyed You could hurt me with your bare hands. You could hurt me using the sharp edge of what you say. JEWEL |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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quatro Member
since 2003-04-29
Posts 392Galveston, Texas |
Thank you to all who read my poem and to those of you who took the time to reply. You are always appriciated. quatro I am my mother's child afterall. |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Wow!!! Another wonderful piece of writing from your talented pen, Naomi. "The words of a poet can speak volumes 'tho no words are actually spoken. He has the ability to make a connection with the heart" Take care......Sue I am in motion |
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quatro Member
since 2003-04-29
Posts 392Galveston, Texas |
Suetang, Thanks again for your comments and your compliment. May your pen never dry of ink and may your pencil never dull. Naome |
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