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six feet then |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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five seats down a man had died no one guessed that he had gone he lay there like another day he cradled his head on the bar five seats down we laughed at him "give him shots on me" and a dozen oyster shots and then we said, "oh let him be..." "How many times can you say this might have been you at the bar?" We let the dead, bury the dead-- as his buddy hiccupped twice. And no it wasn't nothin' nice to hear such wretching of the gut-- the bartender came to him quick-- bitters offered in a cup. Five seats down from me they sweat-- least I noticed that one did. The other never even twitched as his buddy belched in glitch of a gulley 'tween his legs so I moved a sixth seat down... I watch the calvary in come taxi drivers in the door calling "CAB?" they had come for the twins of vomit on the floor and left as everybody laughed-- (we called each other taxi cab) and we thought that wit... six seat then the cellphone rang- I watched him fumble, answering. By the token of his ring, I reckoned he spoke to his wife. "Sorry babe." I heard him say. "Come git me and I will explain." "Uh huh. I saw him yesterday." "Baby, please come get me now..." She picked him up in ten minutes and he left his friend as keep. oh my god so innocent-- at least, that's how they look asleep. Then I saw the pale of him even in his mane of gray he had left one eye open-gaze; the other winked as if to say: "Five feet down I sit from you." dream a little dream of me... but it took another stool to understand we dig six feet. [This message has been edited by serenity blaze (04-29-2003 05:54 AM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
damn |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
yep |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
you have this way of leaving me speechless... I guess you don't know that I read every post of yours I see.. and its because of poems like this that I do... but always.. you always leave me speechless.. its not fair! Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Gotta hate it when that happens....reminds me of a thing..Hmmm Perhaps later. I do hope that you keep your writings...all of them. Could be time to do something with them. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
speechless, I truly am... you are such a remarkable writer... regards, sudhir |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
six feet then... |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Karen...just...WOW! There are no other words for this. BIG Hugs to you, friend.  "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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zenny Member
since 2002-11-24
Posts 371Belgium |
You leave me speechless with your write. You have the gift of doing that Hugs, Kelly |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
well, you left me sitting here in my chair with six minutes of stunned silence hanging in thin air |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
WOW Karen!I can't find the words to describe how your words here made me feel and I feel that "WOW" just isn't enough and doesn't cut it...but you've left me speechless me sis. You are an incredible writer my dear. How I miss you. e me when you can ok? Maree |
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junemac Senior Member
since 2003-04-24
Posts 1005uk |
amazing !!!!! i wish i could write like this. hugs june x |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
It will make me pay more attention next time I am a few seats down...and I feel one of those nights coming on. *s M |
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