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Burning leaves
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Burning leaves |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn 
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I stood before the burn barrel Watching the many yellow tongues licking the chill from the evening The swirling myriad orange sparkings spiraling up through the night fliers and dying, just short of the sky I stood before the burn barrel Feeling breezes from the burning past blowing my hair in the hot draft dissipating my memories into the air along with my billowing breath and becoming indistinguished I stood before the burn barrel Marveling at the jumble of fuel within and how quickly it became consumed The leaves curling and blackening in the maelstrom boiling inside the books, chapters and pages of life [This message has been edited by wranx (04-28-2003 10:53 PM).] |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
Having experienced much of my writings and art taken from me and burned I was able to feel the pain in this poem....It is like having a part of you taken away never to return again...Sadness fills my soul... |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
You just get better and better. I have stood by that burn barrel, thought those thoughts, and not been perceptive enough to formulate them and write them down..... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Wranx, I was wondering where this was going; Good imagery and emotive; "and becoming indistinguished" The last line surprised me and don't know how literal this is.... Could be a love gone bad, or a poet who wants no notoriety or something I have yet to been able to read in it. In any case, choosing isolation myself, personally, it is just as well my poetry writing is a hobby...though I do try to improve...won't have to be concerned abt.famous...or, well-known, and love letters and all paper products enjoyed together (rings and jewelry adds a nice color to the flames by the way) burn just as well... I enjoy your writing. Hugs, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Hey, when it gets too hot, wanna take a break, dance in the woods with me under a canopy of shooting stars?  (of course you know I'll keep this one tucked away, just in case something/someone makes it go up in smoke) |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Watching the many yellow tongues licking the chill from the evening The swirling myriad orange sparkings spiraling up through the night fliers and dying, just short of the sky Wow !! Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I stood before the burn barrel Marveling at the jumble of fuel within and how quickly it became comsumed Dear wranx, You manage to make such good use of the metaphor and even better use of the analogy. Your writing is easy to get caught up in, the burning feels so real and warm from all sides. Jolly good! |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
I knew I missed reading here for a reason.... Bravo sir... Lauren~ Through the darkness |
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dreambuilder Member
since 2003-03-23
Posts 319caddyshack |
this was an excellent write one that I believe every reader will get something for themselves as well as an admiration for your writing I regret much of the consumed time yet - I wish my past could be made to ashes so as not to continually haunt me |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
YOW! had me going along not sure to where but then I should have known this seems different dredging up the old chants love it Ed |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
(smile) felt like I was there...  |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
wranx - looked in that burn barrel, but never thought of it as you have expressed... BC |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
I really did feel those flames . . . amazing write let the flames fly to the sky . . . xxoo |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
descriptive and vivid! an amazing write, as usual...burning leaves...yea...*off to daydreaming* |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
As I read, was thinking of the fuel that is within us...how it can at times burst forth to blazes amazing. Excellent descript of the burn barrel. TD |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
What a love/hate relationship this poem has...the double entendres, the innuendo... the sound of the cracklings... Thank you Wranx... for showing us how to build a fire... |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Well that sure was descriptive as heck! I felt like I was right there, but then again, you are a favorite poet of mine, and I am getting to expect nothing less. No pressure there   [This message has been edited by Mysteria (04-29-2003 03:38 PM).] |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy your read |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Well written, Wranx and as always, with your unique perspective! Cor |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Amazing write! I'm so pleased I didn't miss this one! ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Vivid write Ed loved this |
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poetSeaMaiden Member
since 2003-04-25
Posts 107 |
Oh yeah, burn baby burn! I was THERE with you man! I love FIRE!!! This was awesome, you sure have a way with words, but then I'm sure you already know that! ~ Poets cry with words, not always tears, you see. ~ PoetSeaMaiden |
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Ivy Rose Senior Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 1300MA, USA |
wranx...This was an extremely well-crafted poem. The images and the clear, poetic language intermingling to bring the reader to the intensity of emotion that I believe you were leading us to. Thought this poem one of the very best I've read. ***Ivy Rose |
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