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Open Poetry #26

I Haven't Learned

Adonis Cross
Junior Member

since 2003-04-07

Posts 46
Miami, FL, USA

0 posted 2003-04-13 01:37 PM

A heavy burden falls upon the bard
Who plans to pen a sonnet for his muse--
With every phrase that he, at length, will choose,
Comes twice as many more he should discard.
His fragile reputation will be marred
Should he select a word he shouldn't use;
His subject, now subjected to abuse,
Will view all fourteen lines with disregard--

And even if the sonnet wins her praise,
The praise alone provides no guarantee
The sentiment will ever be returned.
In spite of this, I know another phrase
Will leave my pen for one more muse to see--
Though history has taught, I haven't learned.

[This message has been edited by Adonis Cross (04-13-2003 03:02 PM).]

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

1 posted 2003-04-13 01:42 PM

No it's no guarantee that she will return the feelings, but please don't stop writing for the muse because of this uncertainty!
Her task she has fulfilled by inspiring you!
Lovingly ...
Love, Margherita

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

2 posted 2003-04-13 01:42 PM

Well now, I may not be the best judge of sonnets, but I know what my heart heard...

and I thank you for that!

Karilea - if I whisper, will you listen?

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

3 posted 2003-04-13 01:42 PM

You are a very good pupil!
Nicely written!

Startime55
Member Elite

since 2003-04-05

Posts 2148
Alberta, Canada

4 posted 2003-04-13 01:45 PM

Oh my...yes you have learned very well. Your words sing a note of pleasure that fills the heart of your reader. Your muse is in fine form with this wonderful poem...I love it.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

5 posted 2003-04-14 12:33 PM

awesome rhyme scheme!

Kahlil
Senior Member

since 2003-04-12

Posts 1881

6 posted 2003-04-16 09:33 PM

You won't learn...please, don't learn! That's what makes it all so special...

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