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Ups and Downs |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298
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Up, I go up... The Light draws me by faith ever closer. I reasoned myself near. But thought alone and I could not; something darker works to keep me here. Your words crowd into the ever widening gap hanging like discordant notes too painful to perceive in the here and now. The supposed sincerity of the syllables separates upon approach and passes me by; I hear only your lies. Tendrils reach out and tangle trip me face first. Justify hangs tightly to the recoil and despite intentions otherwise- more loathing than I can safely bear now looks me eye to eye as if I never left down, I go down. Into stagnated resentment bitterness stiffly stirs. Poison rages madly against every known anecdote, stays my eyes from closing, my feet from stopping, occupies my hands with nothing, fights madly against going up… do not forget, memorize memorize Justify. And so even though graced with the authority to not do so, down I fall down. Parallel to the ground there is nowhere lower to be found. An inkling of sanity breaks into my murky realm, shall I like a dog to vomit return and wallow in the last twenty years of my life? No. I will not remain in my lowness - I will go up. Brokenness and counted blessings bring me to my knees- up, I go up. [This message has been edited by jellybeans (04-28-2003 02:18 PM).] |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
You captured the contrast well....Enjoyed!!! Bridgette  "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Poison rages madly against every known anecdote, *************************** I enjoyed the word play here! what a great write, filled my cup to overflowing with so many outstanding images |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
thank you ladies....glad you enjoyed my view from the rollercoaster ride of self improvement verses self indulgence......sigh..... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
jb...I have been there...up the down ladder and back again...there is strength in the fall and it makes getting up easier. The last of this poem, though you took me down with you with those images in the beginning, took me back up with hope. Be well!  |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
thank you martie...thank you so much, your comment encourages me in my struggles  |
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junemac Senior Member
since 2003-04-24
Posts 1005uk |
i really liked this. i have had many of those highs and lows and i loved the feeling of hope at the end. june x |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I am going to take some lessons from you  A great poem. I hate roller coasters, forced myself to go on a few and won't ever do it again, not even on a dare. Yes, I understand. I have been up and down too much lately myself. I always enjoy your words. hugss M |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
My impression wasn't roller coaster, but swing... where a championship boxer was there punching on each downward trip. *S* shall I like a dog to vomit return and wallow in the last twenty years of my life? No. I will not remain in my lowness - I will go up. This has such vivid images and not all of them are pretty... but the strength and hope in the ending are beautiful. *S* Another powerful, excellent write! |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
june, thank you much M-thank you, and yes I know, we do seem to ride the same ride next time it stops grab my hand and we will jump together...suthern....sigh...well my anger changes nothing except the fact that I am learning to put on my own gloves and stand up for myself....that seems to make the 'going up' a bit easier....I will not stay 'down' any longer.....thank you lady |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
I have swung those same parabolic arcs....from a different viewpoint, but the same. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
a soft rollercoaster ride...oh how life is like that! Lady, I love this one! I can really relate to this in many aspects of my own life. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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