Open Poetry #26 |
Love in the Making |
BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
In a single second you moved me closer taking me back to the beginning playing the footage from reel to real fast forwarding to where we left off. Shifting in my seat, uneasy being in the same room I want nothing more than to lay my head in your arms but can we ever go back and love that way again would we survive a second time. Or are we forever held in the pause of a true story that never came to an end pleasantly warmed by a lovers touch swept up by the wind that carried us. Our hearts trembling in reverse as the summer stirs the grass I long to view the vistas from every avenue setting the scene, and make it come alive. Capturing you in the moment watching the movie from beginning to end to better understand the meaning of our love in the making. ~*~ |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Doggone! Your writing seems to have taken another large step forward. Your pen is in a good place. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Smiling... So much to treasure in this vision... Couldn't pick a single line, for they all blend on the page in such a tender recipe. TD |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(sigh) Oh Lori, this is beautiful, sweet friend, how wonderful it would be if we could see the memories like movies and fast-forward all we could! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lori, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Ah, Lori, This is beautiful..such contemplation..heart touching with such reality... Enjoyed, Hugs Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
'Shifting in my seat, uneasy being in the same room I want nothing more than to lay my head in your arms but can we ever go back and love that way again would we survive a second time. Or are we forever held in the pause of a true story that never came to an end pleasantly warmed by a lovers touch swept up by the wind that carried us.' Great verses Lori! Was thinking about something much like this earlier. You nailed it... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Amazing write Lori. Your writing has taken on a different touch.. Much enjoyed...love this as I can relate to it. ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
that's strange how you can write things I feel and think, certain things that happen...I could have written this but never as well. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed..James |
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poetSeaMaiden Member
since 2003-04-25
Posts 107 |
Oooohhh I just loved the line, "our hearts trembing in reverse..." *sigh* I just don't even know what to say except this was a wonderful read, and I've been there, felt that. Beautiful, beautiful read! |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Bluesy: and you say that I have momentum I just rode a rollercoaster up there beautiful - saddening but lovely xxoo tweets |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
What a beautiful still-life! You have a gift for capturing moments and letting us view them from every possible angle.... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
There you go...I am now in full thought about him again. In fact, so much so, that I feel a writing welling up in my soul. You have inspired me! -Patricia |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thanks wranx, that's a fine compliment, especially coming from you TD~ What a nice thing to say, I'm a sucker when it comes to love stories. Noah~ Memories are like movies, yes! Thank you. Pat~ Methinks I contemplate too much. Reality is what it is though. Thank you for the beautiful! Duncan~ I figured I was not the only one, we may be unique in our own right, but there are parallels in every human situation. Nancy~ Thank you for your gracious reply..we've all had our share of heart aches, sometimes just knowing we are not alone helps to ease our pain. Dixie~ I thank you for that, your writing feels the same way to me. Hugs~ Thank you James Michael~ Seamaiden~ I too can relate so well to what you write~ Thanks, I'm glad you're here. Well, maybe we can go back again after all, I'll hold onto my ticket just in case! Thanks tweets~ Ed~ Still life? Hmmm, I like that. Thank you for enjoying the view, I appreciate you. Hi Patricia~ Inspiration is a good thing, I like to think it's part of the reason we are here. Thank you so much for reading. |
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