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I Trust In You
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I Trust In You |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
You caress my open wounds, Suck the crying infection out from me, And seal it with the stitches of your kiss. My blood runs for sanctuary. You're the safest place I know. It's when your eyes sparkle That all my insides tingle And shudder with smiles. You are my happiness. I watch, entranced As the bumps rise on my skin In a wave of wonder. The things you make me feel Astounds me and My feet grip for flooring. You are the break to my fall. It's the way you keep turning my pages Thirsty for this broken soul inside of me And your humble eyes That see everything But never judge. I thought you were impossible. A princess's dream in a fairy tale Is where I found you Nestled quietly under The thoughts of your ever turning mind. You are the sun that warms my face, Gently drying the tears That have dampened my eyes For centuries. Past memories and broken mirrors Lie in the eyes you never look away from. You are everything I trust in. You are the grass that tickles my feet And the wind that plays through my hair. You are love And my love I trust in you. I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. --Chang Tzu [This message has been edited by KoKo (04-25-2003 05:23 PM).] |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
interesting thoughts and write "It matters not how you answer, It matters only if i hear you" |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Thank you, QjQ. I wrote it on my roof, lol. Finally I have gotten the inspiration I needed from nature. I have forgotten through the winter that outside is my favorite place. I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Beautiful...James |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Most impressive with lots of interesting lines. I have read this several times and each time seem to get more out of it. 'You caress my open wounds, Suck the crying infection out from me, And seal it with the stitches of your kiss." Fascinating ... hugs, Marti Few are those who see with their own eyes and feel with their own hearts. A.Einstein |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Thank you very much James Marti: Thank you VERY much!!!  I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Koko, you have a wonderfully unique way of expressing yourself... Warm hugs, EA |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
It's the way you keep turning my pages Thirsty for this broken soul inside of me And your humble eyes That see everything But never judge. I thought you were impossible. A princess's dream in a fairy tale Is where I found you Nestled quietly under The thoughts of your ever turning mind. You are the sun that warms my face, Gently drying the tears That have dampened my eyes For centuries. Past memories and broken mirrors Lie in the eyes you never look away from. You are everything I trust in. You are the grass that tickles my feet And the wind that plays through my hair. You are love And my love I trust in you. KoKo, even though you may be talking about nature, this relates very much to the way I feel about my darling. He loves me so unconditionally that's it's amazing to me.  Hugs, Ethel [This message has been edited by garysgirl (04-25-2003 06:03 PM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
ewww...I don't know about the sucking infection part...but it's a good write otherwise, got my vote |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
lol, Ethel, I was talking about my love! Silly girl, lol I'm really glad you've found someone who loves you unconditionally! A rare find and a true treasure! But I'm sure you know that  passingshadows: Hehehehe, I knew some would get a little squeamish around that. Thanks for continuing to read, though and taking the time to comment! I appreciate it. Earth Angel: Wow!!! Thanks! Thank you very much everyone! I really appreciate all of you taking the time to read and comment!!! I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
After reading your other poem Diamonds With Eyes [Incredible!], I had to read this: "You caress my open wounds, Suck the crying infection out from me, And seal it with the stitches of your kiss." -This doesn't make me squeamish at all. I think this is beautiful, though I am a bit strange so...  Great description, heard peoples pain descibed as wounds many times before but not in such an original fashion."My blood runs for sanctuary. You're the safest place I know." -So good! "It's when your eyes sparkle That all my insides tingle And shudder with smiles. You are my happiness." -Yes love does this doesn't it? It is impossible to be upset- when your love is happy, it creates overwhelming joy inside. I love how you said this! "It's the way you keep turning my pages Thirsty for this broken soul inside of me And your humble eyes That see everything But never judge." -This is so beautiful, it makes me want to cry! "You are the sun that warms my face, Gently drying the tears That have dampened my eyes For centuries." -Great expression of all the time you have suffered, and how it is at an end, and how! "Past memories and broken mirrors Lie in the eyes you never look away from." -Oh if only I could write like this! "You are love And my love I trust in you." -Great ending, and if you are like me, I know what a big deal it is to say that to someone, to mean it completely and without reserve. Sorry if I went crazy here, but this is so good! I have never read two poems more beautiful and heartwarming in the same day in my life. And they were both yours. Oh I love your work! I am now such a fan! Mike P.S.- Thank you for posting these. So glad I looked for them! |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
I don't know anything about this book, but I voted for your poem, OF COURSE Mike |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Oh my gosh...For the SECOND time today you have taken my breath away! I am shaking...And have the grandest smile on my face. I don't know how to thank you for your words...How to level out this feeling and give it back to you! Thank you so, so much. I'm blushing, something I very rarely do! Oh, thank you so, soooooo much, Mike!!!!! I am beyond flattered...Thank you very very much!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
Oh don't mention it. What can I say, I'm your fan! I can't help but gush about your marvelous work Oh I love the little hug icon. Thankyou!!! Man, I would return it but, I don't know how. I'm terrible with computers  Can you imagine it being here? Hugs! Mike |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Hehehehe! It's as simple as this: ": squeeze :" without the spaces! If you scroll down you'll see a Quick View and then a "Smilies"...Click it and you'll see all the codes for the wonderful smiles they have here! Marvelous, you say??? GOSH you really have to stop this my cheeks feel like they're on fire!!! lol!!!! ~huggles~ You're so kind!!! Thank you, once again, for your absolutely downright touching words!  I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
Ok I'll stop now for real! ~huggles~ Mike |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
*sigh* What is love without trust? You say it all from the heart...A love poem worth the read....I love it..you have my vote... [This message has been edited by Startime55 (04-26-2003 01:27 PM).] |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Wow...this is very intense...and very beautiful. Eric |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Yay! Oh Lauren, this is beautiful, sweet friend, I know this feeling so well and dream ever so much of making my future girl feel this special and loved! (big hugggssssss) This is a timeless gem, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Did you find your love on your roof, too? If so, I am headed for mine. Not only does beautiful poetry come there, but the inspiration, too! LOL I loved this one. I am so glad you have this special person. -Patricia |
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SPIRIT Senior Member
since 2002-12-29
Posts 1745California Desert |
It would be just totally wrong not to vote for this great piece of writing - so my vote is happily cast. |
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poetSeaMaiden Member
since 2003-04-25
Posts 107 |
Oh what people do and find on their roofs! WOW KoKo, this is the first poem of yours I've read, and I just LOVE your style, and how you find FABULOUS words to speak your feelings. Too many to list, so many are wonderful! I'll definately be looking for your others! SUPERB! |
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carol Senior Member
since 2003-01-25
Posts 624Florida USA |
This is so beautiful great writing  Real friends celebrate in who we are and have faith in all that we can become |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Startime: Thank you!! I believe Love must be my muse, that is when all my true feelings flow without force. Perhaps almost unbidden... Eric: Thank you! Coming from you that is extremely flattering. Noah: You always were good at making everyone feel loved! Hehe, thank you very, very, much. You are so sweet! I'm sure once you find your special one you'll make her feel wonderful. Patricia: Hehehe, thank you! No, I did not find my love on the roof. Now THAT would be an interesting story..."Mom? Dad? Where did you guys first meet?" "Well, hunny, I found your Father on my roof..." Hehe! Thank you sweety Spirit: Thank you!!! You are very kind poetSeaMaiden: Wow, are you sure you read the same poem? Hehehe, thanks! I don't think I've seen you around before. Welcome to Passions!!! Carol: Aaaaaw, thank you Thank you EVERYONE! Anyone who took the time to read and/or comment, and/or vote has my undying gratitude I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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poetSeaMaiden Member
since 2003-04-25
Posts 107 |
Yes, I'm sure I read the same poem, silly! I only give credit where credit is due, and this has wonderful lines which are so creative! And let me tell you, I'm PICKY! I've been writing for a LONG time, and I know great lines when I see them! These are GREAT! Thanks for the warm welcome too. |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Wow...hehehe I don't know what to say..Thank you! I really appreciate it I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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