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Corinne
Member Ascendant

since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

0 posted 2003-04-23 07:46 PM

Holy Waters

Where wild rivers run,
their songs are muted -
meeting the tenors
of the sea

listen -
as one song ends,
another begins.

Where rivers become falls,
explosions drum out
the beat of downstream walls.

© 2003 Core

wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

1 posted 2003-04-23 08:21 PM

Ahh! These sounds swirl about my poor shack, from within thanks to you.

The river just outside is currently quiet.

Nice, Core

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

2 posted 2003-04-23 09:12 PM

Core,
And the echoes flee into eternity, lovely.

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

3 posted 2003-04-23 10:11 PM

listen -
as one song ends,
another begins.

Love the sound of that!
Gentle and yet so powerful is your poetry.
Very pretty Corinne~

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

4 posted 2003-04-23 10:41 PM

Beautiful writing as always Corinne if only we'd shut up and listen for a little while

Ivy Rose
Senior Member

since 2001-12-29

Posts 1300
MA, USA

5 posted 2003-04-23 11:41 PM

Corinne...Don't touch this poem. It is just perfect the way it is. It is expertly crafted; and beautiful in content and language. Incredible write!!!!! ***Ivy Rose

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

6 posted 2003-04-24 01:00 PM

I almost missed this one...and it would have been my loss for sure if I had.

Thanks for this ... it reminded me of a place and a story... one i hadn't thought of in a long time.. so thank you.

Severn
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

7 posted 2003-04-24 05:19 PM

Lovely...as usual. Another poet with a distinctive style...

One small suggestion...the double plural of rivers and falls is just a little awkward, something to think about..

K

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

8 posted 2003-04-24 05:22 PM

(smiles) Yay! Oh Corinne, I love waterfalls and I always have that spiritual kind of feeling seeing the prisms and rainbows through the jangling waters! (big hugggssssss) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Corinne, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

And that's the most wonderful thing about creating. It will always be a mystery.

***Shakira***

junemac
Senior Member

since 2003-04-24

Posts 1005
uk

9 posted 2003-04-24 05:45 PM

corrine,
this is excellent. i just joined here but wow !!! i am in awe of some of the talent here. will look forward to more like this. thanks
june x

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