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Second Thoughts |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Second Thoughts My gypsy life has lost its crow Time and go concedes to slow My horse has turned a rocking chair And though I spur it goes nowhere. But mentally I ride the rail Still ponder on each rawhide trail Chasing girls in mental spry but Can’t remember the reason why. It seems an ingrown part a key Something in the genes of me Still sight stars wherever I roam And sometimes write a lovers poem. But what I seek seems fluid sand It just keeps flowing through my hand Making piles that melt away Sand castles that never stay For what it screams in low confide Arthritic pride cannot abide. |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Something to read on the back porch Very nicely done (although you don’t need that but in there) ((but I guess that depends on what you are think of)) I can relate, being an old geezer myself Gloom |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
'But what I seek seems fluid sand It just keeps flowing through my hand Making piles that melt away Sand castles that never stay' Morning Sy. A poignant write from you this morning...enjoyed (even at this hour...lol). |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
My gypsy life has lost its crow Time and go concedes to slow ------------- and those will be me wisdom waaay cool lines of the day. My horse has turned a rocking chair And though I spur it goes nowhere. ------------- thats why ya need RANDY!!  Chasing girls in mental spry but Can’t remember the reason why. ------------- ASK RANDY!!!! LOL It seems an ingrown part a key Something in the genes of me Still sight stars wherever I roam And sometimes write a lovers poem. ------------- yeppers...ya got those poet genes going on!! and we are soooo grateful that you do *S* But what I seek seems fluid sand It just keeps flowing through my hand Making piles that melt away Sand castles that never stay ================= Could one verse be any cooler with word play, analogy, rhymes divine, imagery and personification???? For what it screams in low confide Arthritic pride cannot abide. ------------- and who else but you could write a closing couplet that plays me mothy heartstrings and makes me want to give you a big hug!! (and some *winkies* too) *L*    |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Professor You have second thoughts too. LOL Thank you for the read and gracious comment. Duncan A friend in need is a friend indeed, LOL didn't mean to put you through the hoop so early in the morning. LOL JM You read me like a book. Never had anyone understand me so well. You truly are a source of surcease for both Randy and myself. You may reign my ivy tower as long as you like, It is a forever lease. WWRS |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Ah Sy!! Wish I could give you a big hug right now! And JM is right..why do you need a rocking horse when we have Randy to take us for rides? You take care dear poet sir..I'll bring you tea in a bit... and my sister will be along with something for you to nibble on. NO! Not her ear!  ~Morning hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Seymour sweet loving heart, there are words from an old song that have always stayed with me..."but I can dream can't I?" So, let's fly away on dreams and let our aging bones take a vacation. Perfect write this morning. How about some butter tarts with our tea before our flight of fancy? hugs, Chris |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Morning Seymour This is a delightful poem. It gave me a giggle. Especially this part...... ---------------------------------------My horse has turned a rocking chair And though I spur it goes nowhere. But mentally I ride the rail Still ponder on each rawhide trail Chasing girls in mental spry but Can’t remember the reason why ------------------------------------------ But, I forgot that Randy can fly. He can take you where yuou want to go. LOL  Heart Hugs,  Ethel |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Enjoyed greatly. Actually, this made me grin; just love your creativity! Hugs, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
The race is never over Sy...stay on the inside rail and charge ahead...give the horse the lead...nicely written...ride on my friend.. believe in what your heart feels... |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Mr. T., I'll have second helpings of your "Second Thoughts" whenever you choose to dish them! This was another marvellous sonnet! I have never read a poem of yours that I didn't think was absolutely awesome!-- Well, there may have been 2 that were only fine! tehe My father always told me to choose one thing and be the very best at it! He said that would be my claim to fame--well he must have been right!--because I'm not famous! --but I am fairly good at a lot of things! lol Now you, my dear poet, have applied yourself to the writing of sonnets--and you are a master at writing them--and now you are a "famous" sonneteer! Have you had any books of your sonnets published? If not, please consider it! You could break them down into a variety of themes, i.e. Aging, Love, Wisdom, ... Lovin' hugs, EA |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Nancy, Sis has the butter tarts and you have the tea, we are all set, hugs Chris, You are a sweet heart and we do have dreams. Ethel, You see how fast you forget, I forgot about Randy, LOL. Pat,And I love your replies. scorpio, Thanks for the tip and reply. Earth Angel, Thank you for your wonderful dialogue, I here make you first angel on my call list. You are very sweet and I have thought on picking out some poems to put in a small book, but when you get my age everything takes on a heavy magnitude and your judgement seems to go. I find it difficult to pick out the good ones. What I like never seems to get much play and responce in the sight and that bothers me. But then again everything bothers me, LOL So you see I do have my problems. Anyhow a for your reply and another for good measure. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Enjoyed the read Sy... and while sandcastles may never last... I'm sure your words will.. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Seymour~ Always the poetic flow ... it's such a pleasure to read you~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Cpat, What a nice thing to say, thank you. Marge, And you are such a dear, |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
What a lovely response to my reply! BTW, You could add "Humor" as another theme for a book! --but if you never get around to having your sonnets published, remember this, your wonderful poetry has reached thousands of people the world 'round and touched many hearts and souls. Huge hugs and super big smiles, Linda |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Now turn a tune of thought in third and fly the way of this blue bird for lent by you is winged delight as away you've penned this flight... and leave in ponder all you think... which takes me to the edge of brink... Good afternoon, Sy! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
My horse has turned a rocking chair And though I spur it goes nowhere. ROFL... Oh, sweet friend... have you been watching my vain efforts??? LOL Thoughts from you are always worth second, third and more readings... excellent work! *S* |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine A sweet comment, thank you love. suthern Thank you my sugar coated friend, |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
It's like riding a bike but nowadays you need to wear a helmet. "For what it screams in low confide Arthritic pride cannot abide." But you tried. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
RSWells LOL yes I did. Thank you for the read and amusing answer. |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Sy, from where I sit, thankfully, your mind is still willing to dream and fantasize and you write those thoughts with such beauty and grace. Gosh, I just loved this so much. I giggled and tears flowed all at the same time. How I wish we could meet in person for tea and crumpets. Hugs sweet man ... Marti |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Marti Maybe Randy will fly me there someday, lol But for now and your lovely reply I'll send a sigh. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(sigh) In the pursuit of adventure and leisure, I think we are always riding different rails and where we are going is always changing! (big hugggssssss) I think every rest deserves a whole new adventure and every journey deserves its victory, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Seymour, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Noah, Once again thank you my friend. |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
Seymour I enjoyed !! full of fun and delight Hope |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
HopeS So glad you enjoyed, |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Oh SY: how that sand slips through the fingers much too quickly . . . savor it Like you do here . . . xxoo |
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junemac Senior Member
since 2003-04-24
Posts 1005uk |
100% perfect. i just love this. i cant tell you how much i enjoyed your words , i think you are an amazing writer. loads of love from june x |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Seymour, wonderful! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
littlewing Yes it does, june, Thank you so much, passing shadows Thanks for the wonderful, |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
James, Thanks for the enjoy. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
one of your best enjoyed |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
vandana Thank you and one of your longest replies. LOL |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Sy, are you forecasting my future, or perhaps echoing some of my current maladies? I won't tell.... Excellent and too right to point Write!!! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
At least it isn't arthritis of the brain! LOL, you could always use that modern device called a tape recorder, then let some else do all the finger work. Enjoyable. Great sand metaphor. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Magnus Thank you my friend, always glad to see your reply. Midnitesun Something to think about, LOL thanks for the read and reply. |
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