Open Poetry #26 |
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Gollums' Rhyme |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Skulking in our dark sweet lair, pockets full of deep despair, thieving Hobbits, tricks, will play, trouble is a-foot this day. Dine on insects, worms, and fish, spiders make a tasty dish. Hungry Gollum, Precious say, "Let us not be easy prey" Once did walk among the men, Precious came to us, and when we knew then that comes what may, yes my Precious, hide away. Nasty Hobbits, see them creep, Gollums' Precious, he will keep out of filthy Hobbits way, Precious, Gollum, will obey. Skulking in our dark sweet lair, pockets full of deep despair, Yes, my Precious, as we say, "Hobbits can't be trusted, Eh?" |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
i really liked this write |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh what a wonderful write! Thanks for the smiles... ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Joyce Johnson![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
This is FUN. Joyce |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
hehehehe William - you penned this perfectly "Precccioooouussss" *wink* nice job xxoo |
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Ratleader![]()
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Nicely done -- says the guy whose favorite nick after Ratleader is "Grishnakh".... You really caught him with this! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
I love this beyond words..my god do I really have to wait until December for the next installment of the movies? Even though that last one didn't sit well with me. Oh well I have my books, originals were completely worn thank god I got new copies.. |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
This is awesome, I agree with Raph...must i wait till december?( not really ![]() Jason |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Doc...enjoyed how this took me back to another place still light and dark within my mind. |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
QjQ, Thanks. I haven't seen the movie, I just drew on the memory of the book which I read some 25 odd years ago. Judging from the replies, I haven't offended too many Tolkien fans. Doc Enchantress, Thank you. I really tried to get inside his head to write this ( as much as old memories would allow).I'm glad you liked. Doc Joyce, Thank you much. Fun it was to write also. Trying to capture the essence of the poor twisted creature J.R.R. so eloquently created. Doc littlewing, Thanks. Done with much trepidation on my part. To attempt to write of a Tolkien character without insulting the writer belies the simplicity of the read. Doc Ratleader, Ah, high praise. Thank you sir. I've always admired this character( poor twisted creature that he is). The parallels that can be drawn and applied to those around us(and even ourselves) never cease to amaze. Doc Aenimal, Thank you. I've read quite a few of your works, and have been quietly impressed. If I may say so, you seem to filter the extraneous well, paring things down to their essentials. Your comments are appreciated. Doc Jason, Thanks for the reply. I'd have to say it's all about focus. How well you can get inside the subject. For the time I was writing this I was Gollum. Beset by outside forces, twisted by needs and obsession. A shadow creature. Perhaps I should seek help. Doc Martie, Thank you so much. You're a wonderfully gifted poet and an inspiration. Doc |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Ok Doc! I Gollummed you! Printed you out and am keeping you with my Tolkien collection for ever and ever and ever... Nope, not even te 'Stute can save you this time! ![]() |
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Android 17![]() ![]()
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Hahahaha! This is BEAUTIFUL!!! Almost reminds me of something that would be put into the book! ^_^ This was definetly fun to read! The world is good, and nothing bad ever happens! |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Munda, I am deeply honored. As for the "stute" saving me, it didn't work the first time, did it? I guess some people are just beyond redemption, ( so... no, you don't get your nickel back. Be well. Doc Android 17, Thank you much, I wasn't sure if this would appeal to constructs or not. You must be one of the more advanced models. Doc |
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