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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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I want to watch you over the rim lifting my glass by the stem tracing the shadowed planes and fine lines of your cheekbones pausing to inhale the bouquet toasting the Pacifica and the bay breeze that draws me in as the sun wades in your eyes fading behind you I want to hold you there in the swirl pressed against my lips where you linger distilled in small quantities condensing slow memories aged in my heart bottled up for all time privately labeled in celebration of you. ~*~ |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
My, oh my! This was simply fantastic writing, and of course I loved this... quote:beautiful! |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
HALLELUJAH! Ye scared me, lass....wouldn't believe what my next poem was going to be.... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Edder Senior Member
since 2003-04-02
Posts 671 |
Oh my, how i love to read you, never a disappointment |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
'I want to hold you there in the swirl pressed against my lips where you linger distilled in small quantities condensing slow memories aged in my heart bottled up for all time privately labeled in celebration of you.' Cheers...  ! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Mysteria~ Thank you for the nice reply. A romantic at heart I am, never could stay away for too long!  My dear Lad~ Didn't mean to scare the pants off you. Thanks so much for reading me. BTW, that's a nice pic you put up of the Ratleader. Edder~ Thank you for that, your kindness is appreciated, truly. Thank you for making me smile Duncan~ tis my best side~ Don't even ask about the other one...it's not pretty! ~Cheers to you too~ |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Wow! I could see this happening "over the rim" and "in the swirl". A terrific write! and it's so good to read you Blues. adding this one to my library. Maree  |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
Now I know why it is good to let a fine wine breathe ..... heard you were heading somewhere else, glad to see seasons change. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Maree~ You are just too sweet and always so good to me. Thank you for your warm words. Yes Craig~ I was...Now why did you have to go and remind me, right after I have gone and dug my way out!! Hugs, and thanks for reading. [This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (04-22-2003 12:41 PM).] |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
how very sweet and romantic :-) What a fantasy... Failure isn't failure if a lesson from it is learned ~ KS |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I want to watch you over the rim lifting my glass by the stem tracing the shadowed planes and fine lines of your cheekbones ============================ and the bay breeze that draws me in as the sun wades in your eyes fading behind you I want to hold you there in the swirl pressed against my lips where you linger ============================= Oh girl..this is delish!! Very cool use of metaphor and imagery to create this lovely poetic taste. I loved the subtle sensual undercurrent that ran thru its adoration of muse. Very well done poetess Blue. You're the best I've ever felt ... |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Bluesy: like a fine wine you breathe . . . Lucky you came back would have come searching for you Beautiful write Bluesy *tweet* xxoo |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Sweet dreams are made of this~ at least mine are anyway. Thanks Kristie Sue Smiling at you Dixie~ Thanks.JM~ Thank you ever so much for your thoughtful reply. It pleases me to see you here. Hey tweety~ A girl can only hold her breath for so long, about time I learn to breathe easier. hugs~ and thanks. |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Intoxicated by you! Cool... If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
No, you are the Cool Daddy, remember? Here's to you and all you do. Thanks Larry Dear~ |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
your poetry is always worth the wait Rf |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Well gosh, no one ever told me that before! Thank you very much Robert~ |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Wonderful writing ... does it work with root beer ... I'm more of a root beer than a fine wine really wonderful writing |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Hi Rex~ Sure, root beer works! Just trade in the wine glass for a big old frosty mug, and waaa laaa! It's all in the sipping, and the way it goes down. Thank you for the wonderful~ |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Lori, I can't believe I missed this. It is special. Imagery and original concept, great. Love the last three lines. Happy day, Hugs, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Great words Lori, love to keep those vintages myself to pull out from time to time when it gets a little lonely |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I want to watch you over the rim lifting my glass by the stem tracing the shadowed planes and fine lines of your cheekbones Sipping the moment to savor the memories later... you always impress me.... |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Pat~ Thanks for being here to share with me your open heart and mind. hugs~ Raph~ I know all about those 'little lonely' times. What a great reply, thanks. Cpat~ Hey, thanks for the impressive, oh boy! I will take it to mean that perhaps I'm doing something right after all. I'm so glad you enjoyed. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
You do much that is right within your write. The imagery is lovely, as is the sentiment. I've been remiss in missing this....glad I found it. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
What a nice thing to say, thank you wranx~ |
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Ivy Rose Senior Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 1300MA, USA |
Blues Serenade...This is really a brilliant piece of writing. The imagery is powerful and just seduces the heart. Wonderful writing!!! Your talent is immense ***Ivy Rose |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
~Ivy Rose~ |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
There's little I can add to the previous comments. A stiring write, Greatly enjoyed! And now she's in me, always with me, tiny dancer in my hand ~ Bernie Taupin |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lori...such a sincere poem of heart....love kissed. Much enjoyed!  |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Bluesy... I apologize for being absorbed in some stuff lately. I missed this at first, but so glad it came by for me again. I am truly blessed when these things appear in my life...the most precious little toasts to savor. You are a talented individual and I do enjoy, and become inspired by your wonderful insights. TD |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
ummm....Lori.... when ya gonna teach me how to write like this??? Beautiful stuff gal....your words soar  I must have had my momma's will |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
BluesSerenade - a glass to your lips of mellow wine, your eyes seen over the rim. Lovely write, you romantic you... BC |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Sounds like a vintage year. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
quote: This takes the poem from the glass smack dab into eternity... |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
> ooops, wrong thread! OMG~ I didn't think I was that blonde! My motto is, keep laughing at yourself so that you never cease to be amused. sheeeesh! [This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (04-25-2003 10:28 PM).] |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You guys!!! Geezy mo! Thanks~ |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
I want to hold you there in the swirl pressed against my lips where you linger distilled in small quantities condensing slow memories aged in my heart bottled up for all time privately labeled in celebration of you. ---------- how very beautifully written... Much enjoyed this one... regards, sudhir |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Ohmygosh! I thought I had replied to this.. THIS is wonderful..left me with such a good feeling. Great piece of work here Lori. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
Oh, this is magnificent! ...into the library it goes, and thank you for it. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I do appreciate you all so very much. Thank you, thank you~ |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sigh) Oh Lori, this is a very interesting way in storing memories, sweet friend, I love how you depict things, I don't know if I would want to put a cork on them and I would try to find a way to let them swim in some kind of inner-aquarium! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lori, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
just awesome! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
God, this is gorgeous! bottling this one for later sipping |
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