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Such a Sweet Caress - Pantoum (rewrite)
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Such a Sweet Caress - Pantoum (rewrite) |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
I finally found the muse to rewrite my very first Pantoum, written for the Workshop back in '99.  It was such a sweet caress On that weary dreary day, While I cried for bonnie lass, Solemn grief ate me away. On that weary dreary day Death came passing by my door, Solemn grief ate me away, Broke my heart forever more. Death came passing by my door And looked at my soppy eyes, Broke my heart forever more; My sweet bonnie lass just died. She looked at my soppy eyes And felt sorry in a way, My sweet bonnie lass just died, Death said "it's your lucky day." She felt sorry in a way, - Her kiss cold yet sweet to me - Death said: 'it's your lucky day, Your sweet bonnie lass you'll see." Her kiss cold yet sweet to me, While I cried for bonnie lass, "Your sweet bonnie lass you'll see," Death was such a sweet caress. Munda [This message has been edited by Munda (05-03-2003 02:11 PM).] |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Munda~ It is sooooooooooo good to see you and to read this beauty~ You tell that muse to STAY HOME ! Wonderful dear poetess~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Munda, it's good to see your name on the blue pages again. I've always been a fan of your villanelles and pantoums, and this is a testament to the fact that you have talent! An excellent write, you really blow me away and I know that these are difficult to master, and you've mastered it all the way (especially when english is only your second language! I applaud you  Take care, Melissa~ Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world! |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Wow Munda, not only a perfectly done pantoum but a story told as well. You also amaze me dear lady and this was one of those times again. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
It was perfect then.. It's perfect now - How nice to see you post, my friend... |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Wonderful work here, munda! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
SHEESH! I've never ever even tried this pantoum thing...it's a phantom form to me. BRAVO! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Wonderful!!! Perfectly done and much enjoyed. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Oh Munda, this is a beautiful re-write, sweet friend, yay, I'm so happy to read your wonderful form writing again as your heart always has bonnie gorgeous thoughts to behold! (kiss on cheek) Yay, this is precious, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Munda, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Thanks everybody. Your kind comments left me with a smile on my face. High time I start writing something new for a change uh?  |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Beautiful work my friend. It is good to read your work again. Marilyn. |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Munda, read this before and glad to come across it again...and i think this time round i appreciate more the hard work that must have gone into creating this piece as i am more humbled regarding the process of writing poetry... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
good work, very good |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Very well done. So glad you shared again with us. ThisDiamond |
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