Open Poetry #26 |
"Our Song" a collaboration with Susan C. |
Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
They were just words She spoke as her eyes drifted Looking for the right notes Looking into my eyes As if the melody would be found there Hidden inside of me There were clouds of music scored In the stories she told Each one given with a fear Of misunderstanding Always searching to see If a similar story was Known to me I listened in neophyte way To strings that resonated inside As they were struck by the words And the notes they carried Each having its own familiar tune Sweetly inviting me To surrender to her song Care Comfort Their composition became mine On one arching trill Rode thunderous storms Now long since passed But still scaring the ears In their memory In a soft and whispered verse Came the tender sweet of sensual That rose in slow tempo To a crescendo Of quiet after. She touched in me The notes Not laying on black and white keys But that float Her eyes no more in search For she had found Her song the same as mine |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Now here's a duet with no lines... no visible means of saying "this is hers" and "this is his"...it blends well... and I am proud of both of you! |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Beautiful work love these duets!! |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Whoa! One in the same. A wonderful blending of caring and love. As if you've both found your twin, can't tell one from the other. How nice, Hugs, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ron and Susan...Heartwarming blend, you two! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
thanks all.... Susan deserves the credit here... she tied together the whole to make it appear to be seamless while I simply sat back for the most part and gave her a hard time.. lol.. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
This is beautiful!! Susan and Ron you du-et so well together. I hope you grace these blue pages with another. ~Smiles & Hugs to you both, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Ron is being modest..... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
This is indeed very lovely...your two styles compliment each others words very well. Please du-et some more You're the best I've ever felt ... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This does "float"-- absolutely gorgeous and YES, it is seamless. And yes, Susan Ron does talk softly, but I hear he carries a big whip! laughing (couldn't resist) A wonderful duet--in fact, I'm downright jealous! |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Awwwwwwwwwww, this is just simply gorgeous you two, dearest friends, we all sing different songs but that doesn't mean we can't play the same keys, and when we hear those keys, my oh my, imagine the composition that follows! (big huggggsssssss) God Bless You Both, sweet friends, we all love you both so much! You have such beautiful hearts, sweet Ron and Susan, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you both! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
beautiful you two! Very nice indeed |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Cpat Hair - nice, very nice. I love writing with someone else... BC |
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22NICK22 Member
since 2003-05-29
Posts 54 |
very nice |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Simply wonderful! I find duets to be a lot of fun, especially when you both find the same 'rhythm'! Really enjoyed this one. |
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