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Shiver Dancing
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Shiver Dancing |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
 my voice froze, and iced words hung so very still, like grandmother's tatting gone awry and left to die in a window painted black; I watched threads break and words drift to some (final) resting place, piling beneath the ghost-glow of a full winter's moon this shiver dance up and down my spine was (is) invisible to an arrogance I've yet to define, and I could never have worn enough clothes to edge the freeze of doubt or thaw the chill of memory as tears and (weeping) willow-sighs licked the cold stone and I-- I simply keep standing, (shiver dancing) frozen and still waiting for the thaw |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Sandpiper - stunning photo, excellent write... BC |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Beautiful, in so many ways.... |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Excellent piece.... Enjoyed!!!!! Bridgette  "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
I love this!...for so many reasons. A keeper for my library! ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
I think this utterly beautiful in form and imagery...but I can't help taking it personally, for it seems, at times I have such mutiple personalities, though I remain quite integrated, ~yet, still I ask, will the real Pat please stand up~, and triggers which can freeze me happen...though rarely, now. I found truthfulness and being honest two entirely different things and not until I did experience and acknowledge arrogance and sense of inadequacy and pray rigorously for insight did I ever begin the thaw..and get down to the right size. So easy to freeze again if I don't keep my form of spiritually and prayer and insight at the top of what to do first, today. All things are possible but the want to must be there...and the knowing of the how-tos...Pain a wonderful motivator.... Thank you for this....clearly had an impact on me....the wonder of where I've been and the marvelous wonder of where I am going.... Hugs to you, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
This is exquisite. hugs, Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
this shiver dance up and down my spine was (is) invisible to an arrogance I've yet to define, It is beautiful what you've written here Sandpiper... however sad those parting words that cause one to shiver and dance in their recollection. Somehow, the chill in your poem brings me warmth. |
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sister3of4 Junior Member
since 2003-04-11
Posts 16Northumberland, England |
I like. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) Now forgive the arrogance you feel deep inside of you and now work to make amends and before you know it, the robin comes swiveling in! (sigh) This is marvelous, sweet fridnd, your words are like a breath of fresh sunshine across an arctic plain, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story |
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edh Member
since 2003-03-26
Posts 111 |
Very pretty. I can actually feel the cold chills. It's cold. My love is nearly frozen. Not like some shy mountain glistening. But rather like the man on the street who is ready to sell his coat for a needle. I'm the needle. |
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