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Cold Shoulder
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Cold Shoulder |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
You blazed into my life Like a wind driven Grass fire Hot and fast You grew Encompassing My tender roots And then without a backward glance the shoulder you presented became so cold my heart froze a question unasked I stood nearby the flame as it burned and flickered I endured the heat endured the scorch from your temper but I will not endure the coldness that I do not deserve turn back upon yourself extinguish the fire with the shoulder you turn to me now. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
i know of the one of which you speak. brrrrrrrr...........leaves me with chills |
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skyshine 
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
That last line blew me away....what a thought in there. Sad but well done.  ~Elizabeth Dreams last for so long, even after you're gone... |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Doesn't he know you can't freeze the Equator over? (sad sigh) I hope this understanding leaks through, dearest friend, God Bless You, I send heart hugs your way, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sharon, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Poet deVine - your thoughts and feelings come out in this write. I wish you only the best... BC |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
And this is intense too...and you look good in firelight! Loved this! The final summation is a slam of the door. I like seeing this in you, m'self... (but then? I would...I tend to blaze a bit m'self...) |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
PdV - This is one heck of a write!! I am putting it into my library. Awesome. Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
fabulous write and thoughts,,, Poetry is a vision that portrays ones impressions.QjQ |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Sharon: ha! you wrote my thoughts . . . thank you - been trying to get that out for a week or two . . . love the punch at the end xxoo |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Oh gosh, do I know this. You said is so well. Don't know which is worse...scorched by the temper...frozen by the silence. Great write. Patricia |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
I stood nearby the flame as it burned and flickered I endured the heat endured the scorch from your temper but I will not endure the coldness that I do not deserve turn back upon yourself extinguish the fire with the shoulder you turn to me now. You go, girl!! Tell 'em like it is! Sharon, I love this. I hope the person sees it. Hugs to you, Lady....  Ethel |
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Bridget Shenachie Senior Member
since 2002-01-23
Posts 1056Kansas USA |
I really enjoyed this. Sounds like a great way for those people who blow hot and cold just to chill out! Shenachie |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you all so much for your kind replies. I very seldom write from my own experience and this is one of those times...I heard a snippet of a conversation at work and it stuck with me...'blowing hot and cold'...so this is the outcome. Thanks again for reading!!  |
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Bombella Junior Member
since 2003-04-10
Posts 19Western Australia |
Superbly penned. Thankyou for this pleasure. Cherie |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Whew! I felt the feelings in that one, excellent writing Sharon. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
intense, deep, and sad...good write |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
This happens to me too...more times then I will mention...and its no fun...James |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
intense this is... the pen that you wield is mighty... regards sudhir |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
The bearer of that cold shoulder has much to learn, methinks - This is well written as always, PdV...  |
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morefiah Member
since 2003-03-26
Posts 150Spanish Town, Jamaica |
Simply de(V)ine Poet(ry)!! I love it. A keeper, and I'm going to. Thank you for sharing. Garfield |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
wondered where you have been... fighting fires perhaps after reading this...and wearing your coat at the same time... nice to see you... the piece.. well done, but I knew it would be when I opened it... |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Now, why didn't I ever think of that?!? Brilliant concept!  Love your writing--and your way of thinking! Warm hugs, EA |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
That iceberg seems to exist in many incarnations. *G* I like this very much DeVine One... and it's so good to see your work! *S* |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I always enjoy the intensity that you write so sincerely. This runs hot and cold, and yes, it aches from all sides. Nice Sharon~ |
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