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Aimee's Thoughts (If I Could Read Her Mind)
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Aimee's Thoughts (If I Could Read Her Mind) |
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Selina Member
since 2003-06-07
Posts 62Philadelphia, PA, USA |
I hate you... ...but I love you. My world has been turned upside down. I don't know what to do. And I don't know where to go... You left and I fell apart. You hurt me... ...deep inside... I can't hide it anymore. I hope at least you're happy... I feel I can't go on... I'm surviving... ...just to spite you. I don't know what you're doing Your actions are confusing... I don't want to let you go... ******************************************** I wrote this poem in college for a friend of mine. She was absolutely in love with this young man, and he dumped her. I wanted her to know I was there for her and "knew how she felt". |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
That's always hard on the head when one gets dumped, so to speak. This has some well presented intense feelings in it. |
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Selina Member
since 2003-06-07
Posts 62Philadelphia, PA, USA |
Thank you ethome, I appreciate your thoughts  "If it's true you never loved me, there's no deception as you cry..." --SDaws |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
I would say quite well captured thoughts... hope your friend is happier these days at least she should be proud she has you as a friendnicely penned regards sudhir |
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Selina Member
since 2003-06-07
Posts 62Philadelphia, PA, USA |
Thank you Sudhir, I hope she is happier these days, I haven't spoken to her in years.. but last I heard she was getting married "If it's true you never loved me, there's no deception as you cry..." --SDaws |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Like the way you put the words all over the page...yes getting dumped can be very traumatic...especially if undesired or unexpected....James |
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Broken Member
since 2000-03-12
Posts 271The woods |
I like the way you write, the way you've composed the verses in this one. And I can relate to it as well. Yours truly ~Broken~ Such griefs with such men well agree, |
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Selina Member
since 2003-06-07
Posts 62Philadelphia, PA, USA |
JamesMichael and Broken... Thank you so much. You are both two poets from this forum I admire very much. For you to complement my word so wonderfully makes me feel very good about my writing. Thank you for your kind words. "If it's true you never loved me, there's no deception as you cry..." --SDaws |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I can relate well |
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Lynda Member
since 2003-04-26
Posts 52Vic, Australia |
Selina It really is such a sad time. You captured the feeling I remember so well...how universal are these thoughts? The years pass, yet it feels like yesterday. regards Lynda |
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Selina Member
since 2003-06-07
Posts 62Philadelphia, PA, USA |
Thank you so much for all your kind words |
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timothysangel1973
since 2001-12-03
Posts 1725Never close enough |
I felt this way once, and then it was over and I was a much stronger person. I learned from a broken heart, that HEARTS DO HEAL! Reminds me; better to love and lose than to never love at all. (not what you want to hear when your heart is in ten million peices huh?) Beautiful write! Tima If you cant get rid of the skeletons in your closet, you'd best teach them how to dance. George Bernard Shaw |
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