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At Arms Length ( Inspired by Dark Angels "I Cry Out Your Name")
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At Arms Length ( Inspired by Dark Angels "I Cry Out Your Name") |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I thought to write a sonnet take the form and begin with wrap of word and rhyme to explain those things inside which seem denied at normal times the voice of expression or the depth of feel but found instead myself staring at an image held in my mind at arms length for as I have gotten older I need the distance to put things in focus and the sonnet found no form as I remembered yours. |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
very good thoughts,,, Poetry is a vision that portrays ones impressions.QjQ |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"for as I have gotten older I need the distance to put things in focus and the sonnet found no form as I remembered yours." Damn...you're just so very good! Teach me to do this? Teach me how to reach inside and grab at the heart strings.. ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
for as I have gotten older I need the distance to put things in focus but why? tender words from the heart, |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
QjQ... thank you for the read and the words. Nancy..you do not need a teaacher to show you how to do that... I've read you words. But,lol... e-mail me sometime and I'll try. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Inked... why? lol..metaphorically or physically? |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
yes why? just because we age, do we not see with the same heart as the child that lives inside? OR, do you mean that when you hit 40, like me, you needed glassed to see the world with? |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Oh sheesh... dang... wow |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
I would write you dear Captain.. But alas I have not your email addy. Drop me a note when/if you have the time. Mine is showing...  |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Ron: you need no sonnet you have your heart . . . xxoo |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Inked.... we do not see through the heart or eyes of a child as we get older...and add distance to the way we see things by layering in logic and reason as well as social expectations at times... Sunshine... morning... hope that means you liked.. nancy..lol.. i forget mine is not posted.. I'll drop you a line. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Yes....you're amazing and every line simply beautiful. still nodding and adding to my library  Maree |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
littlewing... ( smiling) I have my heart, but it is only a heart... thank you for the nice words... appreciated |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Maree.... uh..you talking to someone else? couldn't be me.. lol... thank you... for both the nice words and the inspiration. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
smile. And yes, that means I liked it. And NO, I'm not joining your conversation today either.  I'm going to go watch TVLAND or something today...  with hugs, from couch potato |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Dear Captain, your vision is far superior to that of men half your age!  Mornin' huggums! EA |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Ser... you go watch Judge Judy or some such rot.... see if I care!!!!! LMAO EA.... you're far too kind... thank you! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Enchantress...are you sure it's showing:  Ron...I don't even think you EVER need to ask that question of me, silly boy... Now, go get your glasses fixed. I would love to see a sonnet, anyway! I did one...with some help...it's over in PW.... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
not likely to find me and a sonnet crossing paths Sunshine... but I'll go peak at yours. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ron...A poem is not only some certain words in a certain form, it is also words of heart that leave a reader shaking their head...that's what your poem did. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"I need the distance to put things in focus and the sonnet found no form as I remembered yours." Very true..I can never seem to get it right..bad stuff, made to be better than it was...and good stuff remembered badly b/c it's gone....its a matter of survival I guess. Thanks for making me think and helping when I didn't do it well... Susan |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
....and as you show so clearly here, it's not the form of the poem that counts, it's the poem of the form.... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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