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Oceans |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow 
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Complex.. Divine desire, secrets in the fire. (Draw a line into the sand, cross it, decide the fate of man.) And I stand only to watch the sun set, Behind crooked waves.. the tide will lift me above. I could feel you behind me, leave no footprints in the grain. My tears will push this ocean away. And I can feel your words creeping across a shivering spine. Whispers cause conflict, and the tide is taking no time to sweep me underneath.. There is no time to cross oceans for reasons you can't even explain.. I blow you away ..crossing this line drawn in the sand. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
neat write...kinda sad |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
terrific write,,, QjQ |
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WindSong Member
since 2002-12-23
Posts 313Long Island, New York |
Welcome!...anyways...I must be honest, I hated it...NAH! Just kidding. I loved it. Here is the truth, my favorite line was this "My tears will push this ocean away." I mean like..It makes you seem really strong and the fact that you can push the ocean away is absolutley fantastic. I really enjoyed this piece. I can't wait to read more. Awesome job!!! Pe@ce. "Life is not measured by the moments we take,but by the moments that take our breaths away." -Author Unkown. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
fantastic write |
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