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RedStoneEB Senior Member
since 2003-06-08
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something im working on just need some insight or something to tell me what they think so far anything at all good bad or anything what you think about it truely put your ideas in here for me _________________________________________________ Awoken by the wind from my dreams Blowing the coldness over my skin Slowly I drift back into my world Noticing something has changed My head begins to throb badly Aching bruised and cold This place I do not know Am I still dreaming will I ever know? I begin to spin in the darkness Confusion flowing lover my mind As awareness slowly floods over me I feel softness under myself Looking down I see skins of fur As I rub my eyes roughly They focus to this darkness This is not where I once was? Where has my dream taken me? And for what special propose Am I searching for an answer? To something deep inside I start to panic as shock takes me In its grip I stay not knowing what to say Hours and days seem to pass by As I take in the world in front of my eyes Shock slowly fades away from sight As im left alone in this world Slowly I begin to check my surroundings The walls turning shadowy and dim The atmosphere was thick Choking me with its smoke I blinked as it stung my eyes Thinking of where I must be |
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AniKay83 Member
since 2000-06-28
Posts 388Missing Since 1999 |
Lee~ I told you in e-mail what I thought you might want to do here. But I do like this. Maybe you should try posting it in critical analysis. That seems to be the place to go to get in-depth comments and suggestions. Keep writing....I'm behind you.  www.heybroproductions.com |
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