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brian sites
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since 2002-06-25
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0 posted 2003-06-10 02:20 AM



I read the poems

I see the bars

the cells we all dwell in

so many different voices
crying the same words

we are chained to the heart
to the mind

to...
       the cells

and so
we
      know
   each        other

though our voices cover all frequencies

float out
beyond the gray bricks
and
look back
           at the prison

such a fragile blue
wih wisps
              of white
         the cries of home
the pull...........the tug of
safe

these 4 walls

but see
seeing
the lines of sight
yes

they are
because you can see--

--you can be shackled

and the
         soul
will

well

it will speak as well as it can
with a chain in it's mouth

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littlewing
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since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
1 posted 2003-06-10 02:33 AM


God where do you get this from Bri?  

is bittersweet it is . . .

stunning actually
in its simplicity
it is intricate
xxoo

passing shadows
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displaced
2 posted 2003-06-10 04:03 AM


uh...wow
gemjop
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since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA
3 posted 2003-06-10 05:21 AM


Gosh, marry me?

he he.

no, seriously, you have a wonderful mind, and i just dont know how u manage to create such stunning vivid pieces.

this is most definately going in ma library.

wow.

gemjop
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Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA
4 posted 2003-06-10 05:23 AM


um, forgot to put it in.  
lol, sorry, but it is early!

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

5 posted 2003-06-10 06:57 AM


and sometimes it's the spaces inbetween?

(YOU taught me that.)



You are a mad viking genius.

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
6 posted 2003-06-10 06:58 AM



Interesting...was reading a thread somewhere in one of the other halls that spoke of originality...and here you take commonality, that which ties us all together, and still give credence to the fact that while we all say....the.........same................thing...

we try so hard
to put our own personal stamp
on it, just as you
did
now.

Viva la difference!

I do believe
your mold
was gold
Bri...

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7 posted 2003-06-10 07:53 AM


good work.... I'll have to save and read again later..when my head is a bit more clear and my own chains are not tugging at me so...


wranx
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since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn
8 posted 2003-06-10 10:01 AM


And so, your diligence in this is paying us all with your odd coinage

Gold....struck with gargoyle

Clay....stamped with angel

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9 posted 2003-06-11 02:43 AM


Brother it is sure hard to follow any of these comments with anything witty or bright to say about your poetry Brian - will ditto what they said do for now?  They stole my words honest they did
Aenimal
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the ass-end of space
10 posted 2003-06-11 11:49 AM


Bri? thanks for writing this
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