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Open Poetry #26

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Kaoru

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since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

0 posted 2003-06-09 06:49 PM

Continuously my thoughts crash into something beautiful..
My fingers create to destroy and if only..
If only our hands had grown together like I'd planned.

I'm sure if I could collaborate all of my meaningless bullshit,
you may be able to descramble every bit of it off my lips.
Let's end this with a whisper and a kiss.
..Cross my own boundry.
Who knew it'd end up like this...

My heart still lingers anywhere between your fingers.
My love is foresaken there..
These hands will take me nowhere.

Kellsue
Member

since 2000-05-06

Posts 210
Waukesha, WI USA

1 posted 2003-06-09 08:03 PM

I liked this - a bit of sadness overcame me. Written with ambition, well done!

Kelly

You can give without loving but you cannot love without giving
There is no danger of developing eye-strain from looking on the bright side of things

eminor_angel
Member

since 2003-05-22

Posts 323
Canada

2 posted 2003-06-10 05:52 PM

Awesome poem. I like the first line especially. However, i always think that there are better ways of expressing oneself than through profanity.

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