Open Poetry #26 |
As Petals Fall |
Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
When the worn latch clicked, I closed my eyes as darkness drowned the sight of you, your eyes fleetingly meeting mine but for a second. It could have been the gallows call to a doomed man, standing in quiver and quake as the final moment fell upon the drop of a door. Or a train’s sudden rush through a crossing a moment after a step carried peril to safety. Now, I sit,misty eyed, counting the dried petals of a wilting flower. A cup catches each tear. The ring of the drop bounding, rebounding...just as my heart has. Darkness has fallen upon the porch of yesterday, where a swing once swung to the sway of sensual wants. The hush deafens my ear as an incessant ring takes sanity away. Will I again hear the latch? And upon the door opening, see the light yet again? The die is cast, I wait.. [This message has been edited by Magnus (06-09-2003 09:12 PM).] |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
***Darkness has fallen upon the porch of yesterday, where a swing once swung to the sway of sensual wants. liked these lines,,, very good write/read.... Poetry is a vision that portrays ones impressions.QjQ |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
awesome! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Wonderful write Barry!!! ~Hugs & Sniles, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Bravo, Barry! This is very powerful writing. You have taken the nostalgia, sadness and melancholy of the situation and ended it with a glimmer of hope...expertly done. It deserves to be read by many..... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Barry...The closing of the gate...can feel the anguish and the wait...I hope it's not too late! |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Oh Barry...don't wait, call out to her in your beautiful words. And you will hear what you desire. Patricia |
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Ivy Rose Senior Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 1300MA, USA |
Barry...An extremely moving piece. So beautiful in the honesty of its words. This is the side of Magnus I love to see. ***Ivy Rose |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(sigh) Very eerie indeed, dearest friend, reminded me of "Beauty And The Beast" and how the beast seemed hopeless with all the petals falling from the fragile flower before being transformed! (big hugggssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Barry, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Barry - another great write from your pen... BC |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
damn! I'm all misty-eyed |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Wow...almost got me...excellant! Susan |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
This is excellent writing... liked the striking images in this one... feels so close to the heart... Thanks for sharing... Regards sudhir |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Barry, It seems your time here(one month after me) has given you more bang for your buck than I got! Wow. I echo the 'deer. Incredibly impressive. Bravo. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Barry Images so real were seen through your amazing words. You never cease to amaze me with your talent. Take care.......Sue I am in motion |
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gyiel marlok Member
since 2003-06-08
Posts 145OHIO |
magnus,another one delivered well |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Darkness has fallen upon the porch of yesterday, where a swing once swung to the sway of sensual wants. The hush deafens my ear as an incessant ring takes sanity away. Will I again hear the latch? And upon the door opening, see the light yet again? The die is cast, I wait.. Oh Barry, this one really touches the heart.......there is such a longing in the "I wait". So much hope and desire... Heart hugs to you, dear Sir Ethel |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
How well you express the depths of longing here...missing... An amazing write. TD |
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