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Open Poetry #26

Descent

[In]Visible
Junior Member

since 2003-06-04

Posts 11

0 posted 2003-06-08 02:21 PM

I descended into a personal Hell,
so opaque to others.
They reached into the fire;
trembling hands,
but brave.
Desperate tears could not douse the flames.

There I dwelt.
A soul in utter darkness.
The deep coma of the mentally ill.
An all consuming to desire to kill
this mind and body, so betrayed by fate.

Behind the walls
of my personal chamber of torture,
I heard the cries of those who loved me.
Just loud enough to hear
and heed.
Slowly, they pulled me back.

I came blinking into the light
Old illusions evaporated
by scorching rays of Real Life.
Naivity shredded.
Now the hopeful realist.
The past understood for the education it was.
The future accepted as limitless,
unbound.

[In]Visible
Junior Member

since 2003-06-04

Posts 11

1 posted 2003-06-08 02:26 PM

Naivety not Naivity...damn!

*note to self: spell checkers are Good

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

2 posted 2003-06-08 02:43 PM

This is a powerful write and holds deep emotions as well as wisdom!
Love helps us out of the blackest tunnels!
Love, Margherita

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

3 posted 2003-06-09 01:32 AM

Invisible:

how inspiring!
this is raw -
amazing writing friend
(you can always edit up to 24 hours
after you post - no worries on mistakes)

this packs a punch
xxoo

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

4 posted 2003-06-09 04:50 AM

very powerful indeed!

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