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AniKay83
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0 posted 2003-06-08 09:04 AM



Senses

What if dreams are just fragments of memory made from mishap?
Just pieces of everyday life and bits of
"I wish...I wish...I wish...'
I'm haunted by flickers of a flame
that might possibly never been lit.
I shudder at the touch of the ghost of want.

A brush of lips,

touch fingertips.

I cry,

yet, still I sleep.

I could wake, but that would make
what's left of you retreat.
Love is a fairy-tale, a fantasy, a fake.
I could need you oh-so-bad,
but real it does not make.
Forgive me all my trespasses, I'm sorry I'm so sad,
but the saddest part is all we shared
is things we never had.
If the intent is not in your heart,
please, don't let it fall from your mouth.
I do not need another dream,
just touch, taste, smell, and sound.


"No one has ever loved ~anyone~ the way ~everyone~ wants to be loved"
~Mignon McLaughlin~



[This message has been edited by AniKay83 (06-09-2003 06:00 AM).]

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1 posted 2003-06-08 09:18 AM


Ooh, fix that little typo.....then it's a beauty...
  
and then.....MORE-MORE-MORE!!!

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2 posted 2003-06-08 09:30 AM


yes,  fix the "might" and you are in business.

Nice mysterious write.  

AniKay83
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3 posted 2003-06-08 09:41 AM


Thanks for the replies. Sorry, you read so little. My comp kept blanking out the message box. I had to send small pieces and go through editing. And you both posted before I could finish.

But still, thank you...

Much love all,
Chrissy

"No one has ever loved ~anyone~ the way ~everyone~ wants to be loved"
~Mignon McLaughlin~

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4 posted 2003-06-08 12:54 PM


What an enjoyable post! It's about time you came back and gifted us with a treasure keepsake.
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5 posted 2003-06-08 12:57 PM


but the saddest part is all we shared
is things we never had.

Softly spoken and very beautiful, enjoyed the missing in your words.

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6 posted 2003-06-08 01:24 PM



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7 posted 2003-06-08 05:06 PM


"I do not need another dream,
just touch, taste, smell, and sound."

My thoughts exactly.

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8 posted 2003-06-08 05:14 PM


Much enjoyed the read the afternoon.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

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9 posted 2003-06-08 06:07 PM


The last two lines sum up my thoughts nicely...James
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10 posted 2003-06-08 06:46 PM


I love the way you write! I've been trying to get to that point, myself. I'm unable to express emotion towards certain things that would make a wonderful subject for my poetry, but I'll just let you do it, instead. Great write.
AniKay83
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11 posted 2003-06-08 07:26 PM


Thanks for all the great replies. Glad to see I haven't been forgotten in my long time gone!

~Much love all,
Chrissy

"No one has ever loved ~anyone~ the way ~everyone~ wants to be loved"
~Mignon McLaughlin~

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