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Open Poetry #26

The Dead Ended Haunted House

SarBear
Member

since 2003-06-05

Posts 205
Massachusetts

0 posted 2003-06-08 12:29 PM

Based on Biased memories
I walk down corrupted hallways
Filled with shattered dreams and goals
Broken glass between my toes
In each shard I see my tear streaked face
And wonder what happened to all my grace
Taken away are my words of wisdom
I used to give
Now I seek
And always forgive
Cant get out of the endless halls
Door after door
Walls upon walls
There is no way out of the haunted house of my mind
So I weep in the dark
Cobwebs touching my spine

note-this seriously is the BEST poem I have EVER written.I dont know where the inspiration came from but wow-i am amazed by the result.And I know that I couldnt have done it without the site. Reading all your poetry has really improved my writing...thank you SO much.Ive only been here 2 days and already im a better writer!!!

skyshine

Member Elite

since 2002-02-07

Posts 3058
Beneath the northern stars

1 posted 2003-06-08 12:36 PM

Hi SarBear! I'm glad that you are improving in your writing. This was a very interesting concept! Well done!

~Elizabeth

Dreams last for so long, even after you're gone...
~Jewel

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

2 posted 2003-06-08 12:39 PM

I have to agree that this is a wonderful poem, a dark theme, with honestly good images. By the way, more reading is the way to writing better, and so keep it up - this was great!

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

3 posted 2003-06-08 03:07 AM

I also agree that the wonderful poetry at PIP, written by all these talented people has helped me.

I agree with Myusteria, the more you will read, the more you learn.
This is a wonderful site, isn't it?

I'm glad that you're enjoying it here.

Hugs

Ethel

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

4 posted 2003-06-08 03:43 AM

wonderful write! good to have you here

SarBear
Member

since 2003-06-05

Posts 205
Massachusetts

5 posted 2003-06-08 05:42 PM

come on people its the best poem ive ever written please reply!!!

[This message has been edited by SarBear (06-08-2003 06:01 PM).]

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