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Oblivion
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Oblivion |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines 
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Oblivion There are some moments when I wish that I could go back in time and retrace those steps that would bring me closer to you To remove those doubts, those gnawing feelings that surface when my eyes see more than what is there, making my insides ache for fear that your heart is not beating for me. There are times when I go blank, my mind too filled with the incessant "to and fro" swinging my feelings into the highest of highs to the lowest of lows, and all I want to do is let you know the truth of me and the "whys" that reason me into oblivion. To have the chance to do that, needs time, and temperance and understanding. You are more than a friend to me and your significance in my life disposes me often times into disarray, undressing what should come naturally, but instead halts me, breaking me away from you, intervals to set me back, like the intermissions of a play always waiting for the next act, and always wondering if there will be one. I leave it up to you to decide if I am worth it, you once telling me so, but oh so long ago, that the fear rises of becoming one intermission too many. And that like a dot to dot picture, one of them missing so as not to be able to complete the picture, mine in dreams having an endpoint and yours in reality without. M "Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less." |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Very nice - I particularly like your final stanza, Maureen - A very good simile indeed...  If you're headed for New Hampshire, is there any reason why you can't swing by Cape Cod to say "hello"? |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
You expressed yourself so well here. It is as if I could see into your heart and soul. And I can relate...oh yes, I can. You have many good lines...but one (and I will not quote it, but rather paraphrase) I leave it up to you to decide if I am worth it...this one got me. You are worth it...I have been coming to grips with that very statement for a long time. The truth is you cannot get inside somebody's mind to figure out the why's...he may not even know the why's. But one thing that must remain strong in your mind is that you are worth it. Do you understand what I am saying? I don't think I am being very clear this morning. You are worth it. Sorry, I don't mean to run on about this...it is just that I know this and have struggled with it. Hugs to you today.  Patricia |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Oh, Maureen, I know this so well. And I have no reason to feel this way in my relationship now. Just how do we make those doubts go away? If you find the answer, please let me know. To remove those doubts, those gnawing feelings that surface when my eyes see more than what is there, making my insides ache for fear that your heart is not beating for me. Now, this is the thing the other must decide...... I leave it up to you to decide if I am worth it, My Gary says I am. I just hope that he doesn't ever start thinking that this "wait for me" is not worth it...... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 GAWD! we are so much alike |
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Tim Senior Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 1794 |
Well expressed. As with Nan, enjoyed the last stanza. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
nakdthoughts - it's a shame that time can't be turned back, but I've found that one can't really go back but must strive forward... BC |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
and your significance in my life disposes me often times into disarray, undressing what should come naturally, but instead halts me, breaking me away from you, intervals to set me back, like the intermissions of a play Very nicely put M~ Sadly, some people don't know what they've got 'til it's gone. And btw, I think you're worth it! |
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cinnamongirl Member
since 2003-02-02
Posts 217 |
Wow... beautiful and profound. Wow. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Thank you Nan, I have already been in contact with my Sister-in-law in NH ( who has a brother in Martha's Vineyard) but the decision of me driving there rests with my Mother. And I will try and convince her that I am a safe enough driver  when she comes on Tuesday. I will let you know. It's probably one of my last chances to vacation or travel for awhile.Patricia, thank you for reading. I guess I let my feelings show a bit more than I should. But I was never one who could write fiction too well. We all think or assume we have worth, but often times it helps to be reassured by arms, a look, or in words. I understand exactly what you mean. And I thank you for your caring response. Hugs M Ethel, as I have said many times before, you are very lucky, the two of you, to have such a wonderful relationship. Doubts are something I never use to have until the past few years. And you wonder if someone who knows you so well can make you feel that way, how can someone that knows you in less time, remove those self-doubts. Thanks Dixie, I have a feeling many of us on here who have lost loved ones, feel the same. Glad you stopped by and left your thoughts. Thank you Tim. Bill, well I never had to go forward before without the one person backing me up. It's a bit different going it alone. Thanks BC hugss M Lori, well I was feeling a bit lonely...it seems. But that changes with the wind as you know. And I feel the same about you. hugs M cinnamongirl, thank you! |
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