Open Poetry #26 |
spaces inbetween |
serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Hear the squeak of screen in wind, feel the weathering beneath, tiny chips to show the breech of care and all the underneath-- look away when you walk in pretend there is no empty space grit the teeth in a clenched jaw and do it, like it's always been. Smell the scent of "own" and know no longer can you call it home. Just a finger from the spine has changed the book and end of time in the small way that he had... like spaces inbetween the words. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
come here, I wanna hug ya! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Done. (thank you, lovie) |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
"look away when you walk in pretend" ^ such a great line (I know that inbetween) hugss M |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Sometimes the spaces say more than the words surrounding them... I like this, serene one... |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Goosebumps again!! I'm keeping this in my "serene" library! hugs lady Karen, Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
umm..hee hee..err..forgot to click the library thingy... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
serenity, You have to have a taste for space to tell the difference. |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
in the small way that he had.. grin... . . . hugs |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
great write but sad, but then poetry can show the world everything human nature has to offer.thank you for sharing..rose. |
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Chris- Member
since 2003-06-09
Posts 52 |
falsehoods in any realtionships are hard but when it comes to dealings of the heart it deals 40 times harder the pain and hopelessness of it all, great write [This message has been edited by Chris- (06-10-2003 06:41 AM).] |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Yes....Sometimes it IS the space sin be tween |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"Smell the scent of "own" and know no longer can you call it home." Yes...I know that well... Susan |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
look away when you walk in pretend there is no empty space grit the teeth in a clenched jaw It's so hard when it comes to this...... "pretend there is no empty space"...... when it's there, it's just there. Hugs to you, sweet friend Ethel |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
When I read your poetry, the spaces in between your words speak volumes! This poem was no exception... Warm hugs, EA |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Yep....you know that I know |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
talk about emotional poetry just so you know, another heart beat heard and felt this one in echo |
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wandering glider Senior Member
since 2001-04-04
Posts 501aloft |
Curious . . . This is essentially a print medium and all the spaces look the same. The life of those spaces can not be conveyed here. Too bad . . . w.g. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
how halting are the spaces that are inbetween the words, like chopped fragments of memory, like cracks in porcelain, (and yet in some cases like life inbetween lunchbreaks - if you know what i mean ) great write here O Serene one... regards sudhir |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Spaces are like air little buoys maybe one is meant to grab them and hold on for dear life? Come here you - I wanna give you a great big Canuk hug. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
hugs |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You guys are SO great... I touch the screen. Thank you. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Once again K - I know that space . . . kind of like a buzz in the air . . . before the storm . . . touching the screen back lol xxoo |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
In the spaces between awareness, there exists the universe. Thank you for sharing these emotions here. |
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