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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2003-06-07 04:16 AM


Hear the squeak of screen in wind,
feel the weathering beneath,
tiny chips to show the breech
of care and all the underneath--
look away when you walk in
pretend
there is no empty space
grit the teeth in a clenched jaw
and do it, like it's always been.

Smell the scent
of "own" and know
no longer
can you call it home.
Just a finger
from the spine
has changed the book
and end of time
in the small way that he had...

like spaces inbetween the words.

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passing shadows
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1 posted 2003-06-07 04:18 AM


come here, I wanna hug ya!
serenity blaze
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2 posted 2003-06-07 05:49 AM




Done.



(thank you, lovie)

nakdthoughts
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3 posted 2003-06-07 06:20 AM


"look away when you walk in pretend"
^  such a great line

(I know that inbetween)

hugss
M

Nan
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4 posted 2003-06-07 07:16 AM


Sometimes the spaces say more than the words surrounding them... I like this, serene one...
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5 posted 2003-06-07 08:32 AM


Goosebumps again!! I'm keeping this in my "serene" library! hugs lady Karen, Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....
                  
                       -Emily Dickinson

Nightshade
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just out of reach
6 posted 2003-06-07 08:33 AM


umm..hee hee..err..forgot to click the
library thingy...

Seymour Tabin
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7 posted 2003-06-07 08:38 AM


serenity,
You have to have a taste for space to tell the difference.

brian sites
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8 posted 2003-06-10 01:13 AM


in the small way that he had..
grin...
.
.
.
hugs

Goldenrose
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9 posted 2003-06-10 06:34 AM


great write but sad, but then poetry can show the world everything human nature has to offer.thank you for sharing..rose.


Chris-
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10 posted 2003-06-10 06:41 AM


falsehoods in any realtionships are hard but when it comes to dealings of the heart it deals 40 times harder the pain and hopelessness of it all, great write

[This message has been edited by Chris- (06-10-2003 06:41 AM).]

wranx
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11 posted 2003-06-10 10:11 AM


Yes....Sometimes it IS the space sin be tween
Susan Caldwell
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12 posted 2003-06-10 10:34 AM


"Smell the scent
of "own" and know
no longer
can you call it home."

Yes...I know that well...

Susan

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13 posted 2003-06-10 10:39 AM


look away when you walk in
pretend
there is no empty space
grit the teeth in a clenched jaw


It's so hard when it comes to this......
"pretend there is no empty space"......
when it's there, it's just there.

Hugs to you, sweet friend        
Ethel

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14 posted 2003-06-10 10:53 AM


When I read your poetry, the spaces in between your words speak volumes! This poem was no exception...

Warm hugs,
EA

Paula Finn
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15 posted 2003-06-10 01:00 PM


Yep....you know that I know
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Gaia
16 posted 2003-06-10 01:08 PM


talk about emotional poetry

just so you know,
another heart beat heard
and felt this one
in echo

wandering glider
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aloft
17 posted 2003-06-10 01:42 PM


Curious . . .
This is essentially a print medium
and all the spaces look the same.  
The life of those spaces can not be conveyed here.
Too bad . . .

w.g.



Sudhir Iyer
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18 posted 2003-06-10 04:57 PM


how halting are the spaces that are inbetween the words,
like chopped fragments of memory,
like cracks in porcelain,
(and yet in some cases
like life inbetween lunchbreaks -
if you know what i mean )


great write here O Serene one...

regards
sudhir

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19 posted 2003-06-11 02:47 AM


Spaces are like air little buoys maybe one is meant to grab them and hold on for dear life? Come here you - I wanna give you a great big Canuk hug.
Aenimal
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the ass-end of space
20 posted 2003-06-11 11:51 AM


hugs
serenity blaze
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21 posted 2003-06-11 10:14 PM


You guys are SO great...

I touch the screen.

Thank you.

littlewing
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22 posted 2003-06-12 12:25 PM


Once again K - I know that space . . .
kind of like a buzz in the air . . .
before the storm . . .

touching the screen back lol
xxoo

icebox
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in the shadows
23 posted 2003-06-12 12:31 PM


In the spaces between awareness,
there exists the universe.

Thank you for sharing these emotions here.

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