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Black Swan
Member

since 2003-02-05

Posts 165
on the moon

0 posted 2003-04-19 06:27 PM

frail
amidst the storm
pounding force
of thunder warns
turbulant
take each step as follows
be careful what you wish for
you just might get it

playing with fire
comforting
warms my face
gets too close
the heat I now feel
of the fire that burns
my heels as I run
into the safety of water
submerged
I've drowned

QjQ
Member Elite

since 2003-04-18

Posts 3756
U.S.A.

1 posted 2003-04-19 06:32 PM

nice write!

Stormy Love

Why has our love recently
drifted like clouds in a storm?
Silently a storm in our hearts
became so violent.
Our love had always been like
silent sunny days.
Why has our love drifted like
clouds in a storm?
My heart begs for calm sunny days
to return to our hearts.
And never we part and drift as
clouds in a storm.
For sunny days makes love shine and
stormy days brings darkness.

>>QjQ<<

Black Swan
Member

since 2003-02-05

Posts 165
on the moon

2 posted 2003-04-19 06:42 PM

I love your poem QjQ ! yeah, I think the weather is the best analogy for love..lol, I just want see sunny days too! hehe thanks for readin! ~Talia

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2003-04-20 03:32 AM

enjoyed both very much

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

4 posted 2003-05-25 04:46 AM

ecrivan
Member Elite

since 2001-12-10

Posts 3923
my own state

5 posted 2003-05-25 03:47 PM

..nice sentiment

Startime55
Member Elite

since 2003-04-05

Posts 2148
Alberta, Canada

6 posted 2003-05-25 04:18 PM

As powerfully written as the subject it is written about....Very impressive writing that holds the attention of your reader...

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

7 posted 2003-05-25 05:37 PM

sounds like you are between the devil and the deep blue sea, but wonderful images and strong emotions. It drew a response from me.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

Deep_Inside
Member

since 2002-02-14

Posts 377
i can't stop hiding

8 posted 2003-05-28 12:21 PM

Hi there i'm glad to see you agian. i really like this poem i think it shows some kind of undisrable despretion. i don't want to sound like i know everthing but i'll surve you with a smile. :-)

[This message has been edited by Deep_Inside (05-28-2003 12:22 PM).]

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

9 posted 2003-05-28 06:15 PM

yep, I've felt the heat of the moment and searched for those cooling waters.

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