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nakdthoughts
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0 posted 2003-06-06 09:40 AM



Rhymed Unease (little nothings)


The emails there
the pictures weight
tiredness returns
with the same refrains.

Nothings changed
the empty home
the pounding thoughts
of need, restrains.

~~*~~

There's burden here
to hold of me
and yet it's where
I wish to be

No song of verse
or melody
to touch me here
and there, you see

~~*~~

I've waited longer
more or less
but it's still "never"
must confess

I've climbed before
under duress
to reach that peek
of happiness

~~*~~

Secrets hold
they stay untold
my words stay mute
no thoughts unfold

~~*~~

I wait, that's all
that I can do
in furrowed brow
and thoughts of you.
M

"Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less."
(Will Moss)

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1 posted 2003-06-06 09:41 AM


There's burden here
to hold of me
and yet it's where
I wish to be


funny how we stay in places..emotionally or physically that burden us..but still in some way hold us...


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2 posted 2003-06-06 09:41 AM



Unfurrow that brow,
gal...

Just raise the lips
in smile...

ease the thoughts
a little while...

SEA
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3 posted 2003-06-06 09:43 AM


you know, I can really relate to this lately....
Earth Angel
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4 posted 2003-06-06 09:49 AM


Oh, I've been there--and done that! Thank goodness that is all behind me! I eventually let it all go and now I am as free as a bluebird!

You wrote well of these sorts of emotions and feelings and ties that bind...

Loving hugs,
Linda

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5 posted 2003-06-06 10:54 AM


I sure understand this.
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6 posted 2003-06-06 11:44 AM


M,  I thought this all blended well,  conveying
a mood of unease,  of being a little "antsy"
so to speak...

Nicely done.

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7 posted 2003-06-06 12:51 PM


hit hard, to the point
nicely put M

A smile a day keeps the world in smile's.
Bernie Slicker

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8 posted 2003-06-06 09:38 PM


I read this earlier, but was still in "sleep" mode--forgive me for waiting?

But yep, the Cap called my favorite stanza too:

"There's burden here
to hold of me
and yet it's where
I wish to be"


I've often called such a thing a comfortable chain...sigh.

Thank you for your insight.

nakdthoughts
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9 posted 2003-06-08 05:42 PM


Cpat, well I am still here, holding onto my home, the only and last place I am comfortable with. I just hope I can  hold onto it forever.


Karilea, thanks, that was a cute little rhyme
M


SEA, where have youbeen. You have been missed.

M

  Linda, well some ties that bind are of necessity. I don't know if I will ever feel free.
Thank you,
M
Sue, I knew you would understand.

Barry, yup I was antsy and ready for a short gettaway which did me good.

M

bernie, thanks again.
hugss
M


Karen,
forgiven Sometimes it's almost like we enjoy punishing ourselves as if we deserve it.

Thank you,
M
  

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10 posted 2003-06-09 04:26 PM


enjoy  your read
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