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mirror man Senior Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 814 |
She drinks him awake swirling in her cup, making no additions only wanting more, happy with this thought and only this. Then goes to bed alone dreaming monsters, screams, remembered scenes, ugly, tormenting, unmentionable things, awakening to fear and sweat. And imagines she’s the whore. This is how it goes, day by day or week to week. She’ll be this way until she breaks. She does not know how much he’s pleased accepted just to be. Note: I think I should add here that I agree with this so long as the "be"ing isn't destructive. I didn't think of it until now, but I think I should say that. [This message has been edited by mirror man (06-05-2003 05:19 PM).] |
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dani Junior Member
since 2003-05-10
Posts 46 |
the first vese was my favourite |
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mirror man Senior Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 814 |
dani -- thank you. I think what's happening is that I'm trying to work out the HTML and you're maybe seeing only part of it as I edit. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
"She'll be the way until she breaks" yeah...sigh |
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bslicker 
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
"She does not know how much he’s pleased accepted just to be" like the ending..would like to send that to someone. enjoyed  A smile a day keeps the world in smile's. |
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mirror man Senior Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 814 |
passing shadows -- yes, I see a lot of this. Pointless self-destruction. It's one thing to make a mistake (assuming it is a mistake), but it's something else to punish oneself for it for life. bslicker -- you are very welcome. Send it. I hope it helps. |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
~Sigh~ I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
This is very good, descriptive. It pulled me in as soon as I read the first line. Do you know me???? |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Bravo mirrorman~ I especially enjoyed your keen eye and the will to accept those things we cannot change. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
talk about a cupful of emotions... well written, mirror man sipping this one, tasting a memory |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I honestly did see myself in this write |
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