Open Poetry #26 |
Vivid Dreams (prt 1) |
Drummerboy06 Junior Member
since 2003-03-23
Posts 46Indiana |
Laying in my bed on a warm summer’s eve, I sit looking at your picture as it rests within my hands. The sound of your voice floats throughout my mind as my consciousness slips into a fool’s paradise. I awake in an empty place, enshrouded with shadows. No life, no hope, nothing wholesome in this desert until you appear in all your glorious wonder, enticing me nearer with the gleaming in your eyes. Our arms finally meet in eternal embrace, my eyes firmly closed in reverence of your beauty. But when they open again, they reveal the unknown truth, the one I have feared, since I first saw your face. You’re not in my arms, nor anywhere else, yet your presence surrounds me as I look about. This land is no longer desolate, but thriving with life. The desert has become a beach, colored by your golden hair, the sunset, reflecting off the sea, forms from your light red lips. Your radiant smile puts clouds in the sky, shining with the sun’s rays, and your eyes, oh those magnificent eyes, they complete the picture. The black is the sky overhead and the shadows to the east. The white creates the silver moon and the stars all about, and the soft, deep blue places itself amidst the calm waters. All this, yet you are still not to be found when I awake, only in dreams where all things are possible. Ok, thats dumb.i tried to post the poem in its entirty but on the preview, it cut off half of the thrid stanza so im just going to post it as part 1 and part 2.be sure to read both!! |
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yv Senior Member
since 2003-05-30
Posts 574 |
Such a sad and beautiful love story. If I knew how to post smilies, there would be one with a tear falling from it's eye. It was so beautiful. Can't wait to read the next part. Junior Member, yv |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Your dreams are indeed, "vivid"! Beautifully written and very mature writing for a 15-year-old! Warm hugs, Earth Angel |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
okay, now running back to read part II. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
following Serenity |
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AniKay83 Member
since 2000-06-28
Posts 388Missing Since 1999 |
ARE YOU REALLY 15??? Not to seem rude~ actually, I'm all the more thrilled to learn you're so young! Now, to read part 2... www.heybroproductions.com |
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gyiel marlok Member
since 2003-06-08
Posts 145OHIO |
straight huh, it sucks. just kidding,it's absolutely strong and filled with backbone,you got some good words on your hands. |
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