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Ishmael Member
since 2003-06-01
Posts 51 |
She wrote novellas that would capture a moment cleverly and completely The one that I remember best was set in a sunlit slice of Philadelphia’s South Street The story of a busy market place In which a furtive young couple clings tenaciously to the little bit of luck that is left to them Their eyes hidden by $3.00 sunglasses their faces obscured by long greasy hair Glancing about for the man that would supply them with that which would make their life a little bit better or a little bit worse for the rest of the day The aproned Greengrocer lording over his open-air stall Impatient for closing time and his twice-weekly ritual that includes a couple of drinks followed by a drunken coupling in an apartment above the bar Then, leaving that loveless bed to return home to a bed equally loveless and considerably cooler And the old woman dressed in her mourning blacks filling her basket in a frugal way with those things she can comfortably cook on a hotplate While she lights her candles and recites her “Our Fathers” in the over-hot and under-lit room in which she will spend her few remaining days This story and others she wrote with her brushes in thick vibrant oils And there, within every stroke a word a phrase a sentence |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
pretty cool write |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
great imagery here and the scene set well with the small stories woven out of what we might imagine we see... I enjoyed. |
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majnu
since 2002-10-13
Posts 1088SF Bay Area |
the last bit was exceptionally nice. -majnu |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
And the old woman dressed in her mourning blacks filling her basket in a frugal way with those things she can comfortably cook on a hotplate While she lights her candles and recites her “Our Fathers” in the over-hot and under-lit room in which she will spend her few remaining days ~*~ She writes, well indeed... to capture such an image... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Ishmael Good writing, enjoyed the read. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
loved this write |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Just an expection piece of writing. I am really enjoying your work. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ishmael Words can be like an artist's canvas...yours certainly painted this scene with skill and a sensitive hand. Much enjoyed! |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
Martie took my response....shucks  but yes you painted I especially liked the old woman........ made her vivid, colorful my eye was drawn nice |
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