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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(This is written upon the tragedy that happened yesterday for the family of a young boy (Ryan) I tutor with of 11 years of age. When visiting his 17 year old brother Nathan after a psychiatrist session, after he received his third strike for failing to show discipline and getting further treatment and punishment in result, he threw a violent temper and in front of Ryan and his mother started cutting his arms with a knife and leaving them to have to see himself bleed in anguish!  Nathan has been sent to a mental hospital and now Ryan's family may not see him again in risk of his tempers resulting in violence against his loved ones! When I talked to yan on the phone last night, he said he felt "unsound" and this song came to my mind which I wrote in a half an hour! Please pray for him and his parents! Unsound By: Noah Eaton 6/3/03 Seventeen years old and uncouth Seemed kind of selfish to tell you the truth With holes in his khakis and a tendency to fail to behave Nicotine patches up and down his arms Can't seem to clear the plutonium from his scars A miscarriaged angel standing in a vertical grave And your little brother never had the time To turn away as you wounded yourself with that knife Now when you turn around It all seems to feel unsound... Nature never seemed to accept your miscegnation Never had the patience for rehabilitation You tightened your fear around your waist like a Sam Browne belt And your little brother never had the time To turn away as you wounded yourself with that knife Now when you turn around It all seems to feel unsound Now when you turn around It all seems to feel unsound You're screaming out in dismay, "I'm not crazy, I'm only misunderstood!" If only we knew where to put most of the blame God only knows that you could They lock you away so you can pray in vain So your brother won't have to run away Did we miscalculate? Or simply got tangled in a twist of fate? And your little brother never had the time To turn away as you wounded yourself with that knife Now when you turn around It all seems to feel unsound Now when you turn around It all seems to feel unsound... You say you see him like a hulk from the outside But like some border collie from the inside Why must compromise wear itself a minus sign? Because your little brother never had the time To turn away as you wounded yourself with that knife Now the world spins round and round You say everything feels unsound Now the world spins round and round You say everything feels unsound Now the world spins round and round You say everything feels unsound Now the world spins round and round You say everything feels unsound... Take my hand, I'm feeling a bit unsound... Take my hand, I'm feeling a bit unsound... Take my hand, I'm feeling a bit unsound... Take my hand, I'm feeling a bit unsound... I'm only feeling unsound right now... Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story ***Shakira*** [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (06-03-2003 09:34 PM).] |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
This is so sad. But awesome write Noah. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
gee what a experience and may help be not to late to him? very good write about this time in your life... Poetry is a vision that portrays ones impressions.QjQ [This message has been edited by QjQ (06-04-2003 05:47 AM).] |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Take my hand, I'm feeling a bit unsound... I'm only feeling unsound right now... Noah, this is so heartbreaking. You have managed to capture so well the feelings that must have run through the minds of all that day. I have two sons with ADHD and know the turmoil it can cause. Thank God, neither of mine ever went this far. I will continue to keep this young man in my prayers. Be a friend to his brother; I'm sure he needs you. Luvs, Marti Few are those who see with their own eyes and feel with their own hearts. A.Einstein |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Noah, Tragedies seem to be all around us. Very sad indeed. But a lovely write.  If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Noah, this is terribly sad. I do hope and pray everything will be well for all involved. You have written about this near tragedy vividly. hugs, Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
So sad Noah...my prayers go out to all involved. ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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quatro Member
since 2003-04-29
Posts 392Galveston, Texas |
Noah, I am truly sorry for the sadness in your life and in the life of your friend. I hope that all works out for the best...whatever that may be. You have an outlet for expressing your feelings in your music and your song. I hope that your friend will also find an outlet that is rewarding. quatro |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Noah, this is so sad....but as with all your work, it is written very well. I hope your friend and his brother get better soon. Hugs  Ethel |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Noah - very sad write about all of this. I hope things go well... BC |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Noah, this is utterly horrific--for all concerned. Ryan needs you now more than ever! ....My prayers for healings have just been sent. Peace, Love, Light, & Healing, Linda |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 holding you close |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
this is so sad,my friend  but enjoyed every word |
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