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A Love Like This
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A Love Like This |
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yv Senior Member
since 2003-05-30
Posts 574 |
A love like this comes once in a lifetime The lifetime lived by two A love like this could only be ours The love we shared could never be replaced On a night like no other Our love bloomed And on an eve that changed my life I fell As light faded to dark His hand touched mine My heart and its pace Growing with every stroke of his finger In the moment of a breathless whisper He took me My heart My soul Every inch of my being As he dipped I slipped Slipped between the passion of two stars The heat radiating from the moon The breath of the wind Every part of the world's being Encapsulated into our dance His hands let go And so did the dream As I woke from this fantasy of love Still in awe of the beauty of this tender feeling My only thought was of the love I felt A love like this Love like forever's promise of life Comes sadly only in my dreams The one that I do love May not love the way that I wish But the love that I feel Will take away any doubt of his splendor Only a love like this Could make me still love The one that I know does not Yet I will always wake to his smile To his scent fresh on my mind His touch tender My skin ceding to his magic Only a love like this Only a love like this yv *side note: I would love to receive any constructive criticism that anyone has for me. I am a poet; yet I am still a student. I am learning everyday from the poems I read. Anything that will allow me to learn more about this mystical artform that is poetry is greatly appreciated. Thank you. yv |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
nicely written,,, Poetry is a vision that portrays ones impressions.QjQ |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
YV: you have written this piece well and I encourage you keep writing! Ciao Roniece |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
YV~ Welcome to the circle of poets and friends~ Lovely penning ... just keep writing what's in your heart~  quote:A lovely, lovely thought~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Joe Houck Member
since 2001-04-23
Posts 324california |
Try as I might I see nothing wrong with this poem that I can constructively critisize about. But what do I know, I'm a begginer. =)....Good stuff. Joe |
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chinesestone Member
since 2003-06-04
Posts 76China |
a deepiy deeling i like this one |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
I love this poem. It's really beautiful. And thank you so much for sharing it with us. Hugs  Ethel |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
good write, almost like a song |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
yv - nice write... BC |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
welcome to passions  nicely written |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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