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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
And it was the mornings that seemed to crush me... Like the gravitational pull was stronger Around my unmade bed. It was the streaming, sparkling sunlight That burned my eyes, Reminding me I wasn't home And never had been. And it was the wind that suffocated me, Wrapping around me the way my Mom used to tie My winter scarf... Tight, painful, and highly irritating. And it was the fire I stood beside That cooled me down Once again Reminding me I wasn't home. I don't suppose I'll ever be home And I don't suppose I'll ever settle Into one lonely, echoing house For more than a year. Sure, that's costly But when alone in an empty bed Night after sleepless night You tend to want new pillows. I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
KoKo - I relate to this so well - a wandering soul . . . this is awesome If you had chosen this - I would have voted for it . . . amazing write here xxoo |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Thanks littlewing!  You've brightened my day tremendously! Thanks again!  I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Very nice...creative and full of soft beauty. Eric |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
Oh, this poem is so, so, sad, but oh so good. "And it was the mornings that seemed to crush me... Like the gravitational pull was stronger Around my unmade bed."- Great! "Reminding me I wasn't home And never had been."- sigh...heartbraking "And it was the fire I stood beside That cooled me down Once again Reminding me I wasn't home."- Wow this is such a good verse. "But when alone in an empty bed Night after sleepless night You tend to want new pillows."- This is so good and sad, it makes me cry. This is one of the most beautiful and depressing reads for me in a long time. Be sure I'll be scouring this site for more of your work. And I'm sorry you feel this way, I relate to this so much myself. (tear) I hope you do find a home afterall. Mike Fessel  P.S.- I love the quote! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
how deeply this touched me...I can't even explain |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I was recently thinking I should buy new pillows...James |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Ericc: Thanks muchly MikeFessel: Wow! You're really, really MUCH too kind! I'm actually blushing!! I almost never do that! LoL, thank you!! passing shadows: Your words spoke more than enough. Thank you very much! James: Thanks for reading and taking the time to comment Thank you everyone!!! I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
How I love this..with all its contrasts, thank you |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
This was very enjoyable Koko... Very nice flow... Great Job! Richy |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
KoKo, Oh my, the ache in this mirrored feelings I've had many times. Great imagery and subtle emotions, your choice of words just right. This surely does hit close to 'home'... Hugs, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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