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The Dollar Bill
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The Dollar Bill |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
She stared at the paper in her hand a dollar bill it had been such a long time since she’d seen money or held it or spent it it looked different somehow She smoothed the corners lovingly caressed the picture admired the writing she couldn’t stop staring at it a dollar what would she buy? Her mind whirred with thoughts so many things a decision she had to do it just make up her mind and decide. Someone walked by she quickly put the dollar away hid it in the inside pocket of the ragged army coat she found in the back of the Goodwill She shuffled down the alley her secret money safe from thieves and the government who stole everything It had been such a long time since she had money since she spent it since she knew what it was She hid behind a box in the alley waiting for the demons to find her to steal her money and hurt her again It had been such a long time since she knew where her mind was and what she had done to lose it |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
smile. (Brother Tim DOES have a sister!) we are on one of those wavelengths, m'friend. I appreciated this much today.  |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
This is a sad but truthful poem Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Outstanding! Enjoyed. Chris  "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
A fabulous write!!! It's the quality of the complement that i feel, not the quanity. |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Well done my poet friend. You have me there with her. I could see and feel her. Very nicely done. Marilyn. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Poet deVine - I was there when I read this, amazing... BC |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
I salute you. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Amazing write. Simply amazing! Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) Oh Sharon, this is so very saddening, dearest friend, how dreadful it is to live in a capitalistic world which will only kill more people than provide! Sometimes my dad even snickers and does ahlf-laugh when I tell him that and says "Well, what could our world be without money?" which feels hopeless to me to hear many say that! (sad sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sharon, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
A great write Sharon, the imagery is fantastic.. I was there a few steps away watching her. Excellent! Maree |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
 you have a very tender rainbow heart |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
A very fine job on this Sharon-- love it muchly JThere is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
'It had been such a long time since she knew where her mind was and what she had done to lose it' Perfectly understated title Sharon. Powerfully accurate and vivid write. |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
damn Sharon this is.... this one is getting to me I can see the poor woman this is amazing |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Hi Poet de Vine, I don’t know if we’ve met yet. I really liked this. I can really respect someone who speaks out for those, who are rarely heard. Thank You, this was very nice. Richy |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
very sad |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Indeed - We know far too little of this growing corner of the world - But the cardboard boxes are getting larger, and they'll be extending out into the streets before long... This is a strong piece, PdV - Thanks for writing it... |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Outstanding, heartfelt penned. Charisma |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Sharon, this is such a tender-hearted and compassionate poem. It touched my heart. I wish that I knew more to do for these poor people. I heard that some of the mental hospitals put people out a few years ago. The ones who didn't have someone to help them, had to do the best they could at taking care of themselves. I wonder if they are still doing that? Hugs to you and them Ethel |
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paladin
since 2001-08-05
Posts 930Pensacola,Fl. |
It is a sad commentary of our society that so many mentaly disrurbed people are homeless.Uncared for and wandering the streets alone. paladin ....a knight without armor [This message has been edited by paladin (06-01-2003 10:18 AM).] |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you for reading. This was inspired by seeing a homeless person this week. Someone handed her a dollar and she just looked at it like it was foreign currency. |
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