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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
A young boy runs and tumbles amongst blades of grass, searching for four leaf clovers, all he finds are three. Still he smiles and he laughs, finding pefection in all that he sees. A radiant sun makes him smile, dizzied by a sky so bright, so beautiful, so boundless, so free. Tree branches bending in the wind, beckon to enjoy the comfort of their shade. But he's too busy to notice their call. Chasing butterflies he can never catch, having way too much fun to care, arms outstretched he soars through atmosphere. Soaring and swirling across this field sprinkled with wildflowers of every hue, gems of azure, crimson, violet and lavender strewn. This living kaleidoscope overwhelms the senses till stumbling he lays himself down in ecstasy, eyes wide, overwhelmed by a world surreal. Staring up at that majestic sky, his mind soars amongst clouds lofty high. Imagination and reality blending and whirling, into a perfect mix of wondrous awe. An innocent heart trusting all... he never sees it fall. Barrenness now where life used to be, Beautiful sky obscured by haze, a lovely field buried in ash. Tree branches screaming, drowned out by the roaring flames. What had been a kaleidoscope of life, replaced by the aura of death. The earth crying out in agony, tells a tale of innocence lost, alas there is no one left to listen. No he never saw it fall. By Michael J Fessel 4/06/03 This is old and poorly written I'm sure, but I haven't written anything new that is any good. Just a metaphorical poem based on my longing to return to an innocence long since destroyed in me. [This message has been edited by MikeFessel (05-31-2003 10:07 AM).] |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Mike, My friend, I have longed for perfect memories of childhood as well. But in order to have perfect memories, perfection must have been in all events of your life. This is never the case; perfection is unachievable. Yes, I have known others who have seemed to have had perfect childhoods and asked why could that not be me. I feel there is always a reason for everything, Mike. Ours is not to question why... for He knows, He who resides in heaven's sky. If you need to talk, please e-mail. I am here to listen. I will never judge and I hope I didn't appear harsh here. I do empathasize with your feelings. One thing, though, it is never too late to rebuild as long as He continues to put breath in your body, you have not come to demise. Patricia |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Mike, this is a very heart-felt write, which is written superbly. You are a very talented writer. Thank you for sharing your heart with us. Hugs,  Ethel |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks for the openess of this write... "This living kaleidoscope overwhelms the senses till stumbling he lays himself down in ecstasy, eyes wide, overwhelmed by a world surreal. Staring up at that majestic sky, his mind soars amongst clouds lofty high. Imagination and reality blending and whirling, into a perfect mix of wondrous awe. An innocent heart trusting all... he never sees it fall." I appreciated reading this poem! |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
Patricia, First of all thank you so much for caring like you always do  Second of all, you misinterpreted my poem I am afraid  In this I was longing to return to my very early childhood, when I was very young. That was a time when I was innocent, carefree, and happy. And that has all been destroyed in me. That is kind of what I was saying, simplified of course, because I don't feel like delving deeper right now LOLThank you for your concern! And yup, I think I will take you up on that EMail invitation Mike |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
Ethel, WoW! Thank you so much Ethel. That was so kind of you to say that! Especially since this poem is from early April, and I had been barely writing a month then. You are too sweet  Big hugs for you!Mike He he I just want to say thank you again. You made me feel really good! [This message has been edited by MikeFessel (05-31-2003 10:19 AM).] |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
Ethome, Thank you Ethome. I really appreciated your reply. Glad you enjoyed this Mike |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Hello Mike, when I read the title I thought today Mike is in the happy mood and indeed reading your very very beautiful poem I felt this .... until the last lines where the image changed. The innocence of childhood ALWAYS resides within us I am sure, only we can't grasp it anymore, but at times it surfaces and that was when you were able to remember so perfectly to write such touching lines. May your eyes look at things with the innocence of the child even now, when reality doesn't show a perfect world ... You are whole (the child slumbers within). Love, Margherita |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
Margherita, Oh this is an old poem. I am happy! That is why I have no new poems, I suck at writing happy poems LOL A hug for you!Mike P.S.- If I wrote this now, I would have stopped before the ending! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
don't we all wish we could go back |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
You know, as we live our childhood dreams, our grip on hope steams...then or now, very well done, very clear and inspiring write. TD |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
Passing Shadows, Yes I do believe most do. But when the present is great and the future full of hope, well than there really is no need or desire to, wouldn't you agree? Hi again by the way! Mike |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
ThisDiamond, Oh thank you so much! and I love this line from your reply: "As we live our childhood dreams, our grip on hope steams...then or now" -Oooh good point, I like this. Made me think about this in a whole new light. Thank you for that Mike |
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