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Gone Without Goodbye
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Gone Without Goodbye |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows 
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The last time I touched you I was fine until I closed my eyes; though only for my heart's beat, it was enough to let you come again inside my mind, to leave part of yourself, hot and thickly clinging, high up against the back wall of my soul; always the feel of you stays with me past the moment you withdraw, but no matter how I try to hold the memory of the thought, I ought to know by now it cools and thins, too soon dissolves, then runs down through me like a sudden unexpected summer rain. ©2003 by icebox |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
wow 3D imagery here into the library for safe keeping sad, but exquisitely written [This message has been edited by Midnitesun (05-29-2003 12:55 AM).] |
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Rdz9 Member
since 2003-03-16
Posts 142MT, USA |
Touching... well written... reminds me of a summer love. One in a sea of millions has the power to change the world... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I"m left aching |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
icebox I think some people touch inside in such a way, that they stay forever in the soul. The ache comes when you can't hold on to the feel of them. I do like your poetry...feels warm and thoughtful, not like an iceman. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
liked it  |
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carol Senior Member
since 2003-01-25
Posts 624Florida USA |
icebox,very good poetry I liked the read Real friends celebrate in who we are and have faith in all that we can become |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
"it was enough to let you come again inside my mind, to leave part of yourself, hot and thickly clinging, high up against the back wall of my soul;" this is one of the most vivid images I've read in a while...you've done an excellent job, as always...I truly enjoyed this... sp  just a hang-up call and the quiet breathing of our persian we call cajun on a wednesday... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
but no matter how I try to hold the memory of the thought, I ought to know by now it cools and thins, too soon dissolves, then runs down through me like a sudden unexpected summer rain. =================== superb imagery and personification... and the emotions rise off the page... excellent, expressive writing poet IB. Darkness cannot drive out darkness ... only light can do that. |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Midnitesun ~ Thank you for reading my poem and for your comment. I am glad you enjoyed this. Rdz9 ~ Yes, summer love never can be re-captured. Thank you for reading my poem. passing shadows ~ I'd offer to place my hand over the ache and make it go away, but that is perhaps too easily taken as inappropriate. *smile* Thank you for reading my poem. Martie ~ *laugh* Someone once said I was like ice water given to a freezing man. I do believe in the thread that connects across time, but I also know that the senses can be dulled by pain. Thank you for reading my poem and for your comments. vandana ~ I am glad you liked it. Thank you for reading it. carol ~ Thank you; I appreciate your comment. snowpants ~ Thank you for reading my poem and for your comment. I am glad you enjoyed it. Janet Marie ~ Thank you for reading my poem and for your comment. I am glad you like the imagery. |
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