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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I realize the fault is mine. It was I, who made you God. Overlooking obvious of flesh and bone and even salt left here by your tears. I saw your anger and denied the ominous humanity and there was lust between the lines-- I shrugged and said "So flesh will breach." Still I followed willingly needing you to be divine. I clamped the fronds of worship palms tightly over my deaf ears. I did not want to hear the truth. I placed you on the pedestal then I prayed for fortitude to the plastic rectitude I had molded for myself. I cursed the temple that you graced saying "There no God can live." Then I toppled you myself. I took myself--creating YOU-- and blamed you when I ceased to live. I realize the fault is mine, for you did not come to Earth to prove to me that you're divine... You came here, telling me my worth-- and I denied me, thrice. If by will and heart I can undo the error of this sin, let the ghost descend on me as I pray, again--again: "I realize the fault is mine." I realize. The fault is mine. [This message has been edited by serenity blaze (05-30-2003 01:31 AM).] |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
Okay, this is incredibley sad. To think that you, who grace us with your gift of verse, could have a reality that is thus, is just a crime in my opinion. You should be loved, pampered, and of course, adored. Take the god off his pedestal, and put yourself in your rightful place my dear. You deserve the very best.  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
psssst....hey you...White Rose?...smiling atchoo. And my head is kind of NOT in discussion mode, but I wanted to thank you for that loving concern you showed in your reply. But it's actually, not a sad poem--more of a simple realization poem, and moving on to a different type of relationship with ANYONE may mean the death of one phase of relating, but also the birth of another phase. Hopefull better, yes? Yer a doll lady...  And I agree with you one hundred percent on one thing: "You should be loved, pampered, and of course, adored." Oh, forgive me,  I know not what I do!More hugs you. |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"I clamped the fronds of worship palms tightly over my deaf ears." Perfect. How many gods have we nailed to trees across how many centuries.... There is really not much pleasure in building idols without the eventual catharsis of dragging them back down to the ground. This is a very good bit of work. Thank you for sharing it. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
hey you, thank you much for the reply, and yes, I was not singling out any one particular "God", but anything we choose to deify. Thanks for your understanding, it's much appreciated.  |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I felt this way about a microwave once but it died, and I had to buy a new one  All kidding aside, lady you can squeeze a word for all its worth, and then some, check this out for perfection will ya ... quote: Excellent work Lady Serenity |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
there ya go again, clamping fronds enjoyed the confession |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
smiles to midnite--I've stuck fronds in my ears so many times apparently my brain has turned to coconut--thanks for reading lady! and sharon, um...Got Milk?  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
dang!  you said it! this is so ME! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
"I clamped the fronds of worship palms tightly over my deaf ears." Very creative writing.......This has a captivating traditional flavor.......exceptional write! |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Impressive...glitters of estute self reflection. Well done, as always. TD |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sometimes, in the realize we have to admit... we close our eyes... |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
oh gosh lady....we live in a mirror...just this weekend I reached this same point, and I finally listened to something I needed to hear for 30 years.... oh my this...makes me cry.... your inward journey is very touching my friend...sigh |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
You came here, telling me my worth-- and I denied me, thrice. That is very easy to do (the denying) ...until you learn that you do have worth. nice M |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Karen...what can I say? I heard this one loud and clear...especially this... "I took myself--creating YOU-- and blamed you when I ceased to live." Been there too many times to count. And this... "You came here, telling me my worth-- and I denied me, thrice." And this... "I realize the fault is mine. I realize. The fault is mine." I know this all too well. This just speaks volumes, lady. Big hugs, you. ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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