the measuring of mrs. wallace

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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2003-05-27 07:39 AM

I took the moves
as offered me
and hopped
the cross
of Good St. George--
a sacrifice
of men in crown
as I leapt at opportune,
collecting hats
of souvenir
never dreaming
that I was
the dragon they all feared.

I took the moves
as offered me
(for isn't that
part of the game?)
kings are lost
by strategy
the middle falls
and corners stand
too tall to boast a glee--
with my head held proudfully;
I made it to the other side.

"King ME!"
I awaited crown--
curtsey on the corner dark
of empty parliament
I dreamt--
nodding, my pretend--
my chin dropping to my chest
waiting for the goldenring
wishing that I had not hopped
across the board so fast...

Turn me over--
all brand new,
I can take the moves...
(n fact, I had invented them)
But let me bend my neck to you
and grant concession's whispering,
eyes clamped tight
of wishing twice:

"King me, my love--King me?"

[This message has been edited by serenity blaze (05-27-2003 07:45 AM).]

Janet Marie
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1 posted 2003-05-27 08:03 AM

King ME!"
I awaited crown--
curtsey on the corner dark
of empty parliament
I dreamt--
nodding, my pretend--
my chin dropping to my chest
waiting for the goldenring
wishing that I had not hopped
across the board so fast...

Turn me over--
all brand new,
I can take the moves...
(n fact, I had invented them)
But let me bend my neck to you
and grant concession's whispering,
eyes clamped tight
of wishing twice:

=========================================

Ka...you do the poetic curtsey like so few can.

Darkness cannot drive out darkness ... only light can do that.
Hate cannot drive out hate ... only love can do that.
MLK

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2 posted 2003-05-27 09:25 AM

Brilliant imagery....love the way you carry both levels of meaning right through from start to finish.

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Sunshine

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3 posted 2003-05-27 10:00 AM

"King ME!"
I awaited crown--
curtsey on the corner dark
of empty parliament
I dreamt--
nodding, my pretend--
my chin dropping to my chest
waiting for the goldenring
wishing that I had not hopped
across the board so fast...

Turn me over--
all brand new,
I can take the moves...
(n fact, I had invented them)
But let me bend my neck to you
and grant concession's whispering,
eyes clamped tight
of wishing twice:

"King me, my love--King me?"

~*~

For every reader, certain lines pop out with meaning of a deeper degree...

these are mine...

hugs you.

Earth Angel
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4 posted 2003-05-27 10:09 AM

--and he'd be kinging the queen of double entendre! Another brill from your quill!

Warm hugs,
EA

Brad Majors

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5 posted 2003-05-27 11:57 AM

Pure Brilliance

Opeth
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6 posted 2003-05-28 07:55 AM

I was much intrigued by the metaphor used in this write. I did, however, find myself thinking both chess and checkers was the game at hand.

Queen me!

Enjoyed!

nakdthoughts
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7 posted 2003-05-28 09:06 AM

Me too, what Opeth said.

An interesting write, in a style as only you can do.

hugss
M

serenity blaze
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8 posted 2003-05-28 02:24 PM

Thanks for reading, and I do tend to mix up the metaphors a bit, but actually this was just my bit of a tribute to a woman that I begrudgingly admire. Not sure that I would've LIKED her much, but I always did admire her.

Thanks for your patience with me, once again. I'll go read now.

Mysteria

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9 posted 2003-05-28 04:08 PM

Well Karen, you explained before I told you what I thought and it ruined my rendition LOL, you would love it - it would be moved to MC. Loved this m'friend.

vlraynes
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10 posted 2003-05-28 04:12 PM

Hmm...I really thought I had replied to this one.
Oh well...I'll do it right now.
I have to echo JM...nobody does it like you.
This is amazing, as always, my friend.
Hugs you!
~Vicky
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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