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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
Tremors abide corrosive minds. Leprous skin scars the soul within. Abuse the seed sweet thoughts turn rancid. Malicious fervent breeds malcontent. Feed on the innocent as others did upon you. Rinse those bloody hands, watch the blame wash away. Easily you hide the truth, transforming lies with twisted grin. Is it getting hard to breathe, feeling your conscience choke? No way to settle the inner being, when its swimming in viscous bile. Vile acid consuming your soul, as you realize all is lost. Reach out for those you've driven away close enough only to watch you fall, and to spit in your face. By Michael J Fessel |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
appreciate exposes on how angst and frustration can alter us so as to evoke reactions as you suggest at the end of your poem. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 awesome write! |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
Oh thank you Passing Shadows  Wow you made me feel really good about this poem. You write so well, your opinion means tons to me! MikeYou may go by the name Passing Shadows, but whenever you pass through you always seem to bring me a little light. Thank you for that  [This message has been edited by MikeFessel (05-24-2003 10:50 AM).] |
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quatro Member
since 2003-04-29
Posts 392Galveston, Texas |
Mike, You express much frustration here and I hope and pray that you will be able to hold on to that special person in your life. One who will turn your pain to joy. Much love to you and please keep writing. You do it well. quatro |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
Quatro, Thank you. I hope I can too. The question is, how much longer till she gets sick of me? Mike |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Mike, I wonder if it is that easy for them. It so appears they wash their hands of blame (more like a simple rinse sometimes.) Do you think it does bother them...and does their conscience choke them? I wonder...then I wonder again, am I no better if I hope that it is the case? I am thinking of a recent particular incident...myself. Did you know that? I wonder who knows what about me here on this forum. It seems I get so many answers, so many hugs, so much consoling here through the words of these beautiful artists. I can't help but wonder who is been peeking into my soul. Thank you for your comments on "A Freshman." I used to write when I was a teenager...then just a handful of poems since. So, they sent me back to 9th grade to learn the basics again. I am seeking that creamy smoothness right now. I am working toward it, but the only way you can accomplish that is by working the craft. I liked this piece...made me ponder and wonder. Take care, my friend. Patricia |
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