I would have said I'm sorry

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Edder
Senior Member

since 2003-04-02

Posts 671

0 posted 2003-05-23 09:40 PM

I would have said I'm sorry,
but the words just never came.
I should have asked forgiveness,
but vanity's to blame.
I should have reached out to you,
and hung my head in shame.
Though I never meant to hurt you,
regrets won't ease the pain.

Just expressing my frustration over the break-up of a friend and his wife.

[This message has been edited by Edder (05-24-2003 11:28 AM).]

whiskey

Senior Member

since 1999-12-28

Posts 1278
Australia

1 posted 2003-05-23 10:04 PM

Well written, I feel for your friends sometimes love just isnt enough and sorry can be the hardest word to say

Julie

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

2 posted 2003-05-23 10:14 PM

Well done, my friend...sorry about your friends.

jwesley

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

3 posted 2003-05-23 10:39 PM

Edder, this is a really good write.
It's hard when close friends break up and
you feel for both of them. I've been in that
situation before.
Hugs to you and your friends,
Ethel

Edder
Senior Member

since 2003-04-02

Posts 671

4 posted 2003-05-23 11:03 PM

Julie- thank you for the kind words. i can only hope he sees his mistakes before it's too late.

jwesley- thanks for the read.

Ethel- thank you so much.

lost_star
Member

since 2003-03-15

Posts 114
NY, U.S.A

5 posted 2003-05-24 01:27 AM

sometimes people can hear your sorry with out you saying it. Great write!

Richy
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 3050

6 posted 2003-05-24 01:43 AM

Hey Edder, writing your poem shows how much you care about your friends. That's really cool. This is just a thought, but it sounds like your friend is regretful for hurting his wife. And so, replacing the first line with, “I should have said I’m sorry” would flow with the next two, “I should have’s” rather smoothly.

I hope you don’t mind the suggestion? Either way, I think it’s a real good write!

Welcome to Passions!

Richy

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

7 posted 2003-05-24 03:31 AM

Edder
Senior Member

since 2003-04-02

Posts 671

8 posted 2003-05-24 11:33 AM

lost_star- thank you for reading. glad you enjoyed.

Richy- I made some changes last night before I read your comments...does this flow better?

passing shadows- thanks for the hug!

KoKo
Senior Member

since 2003-02-15

Posts 995
Inside the shadow's shadow

9 posted 2003-05-24 05:25 PM

Eddles!! Your poetry is so awesome even when you don't have much inspiration. I guess you sometimes have to look at other places when the inspiration just isn't inside YOU. Kind of like an inspiration transplant...? lol, I'm not making any sense, am I?

~huggles~ You've got some awesome talent, sweety!!! Love you!!

I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man.
--Chang Tzu

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