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Open Poetry #26

Into the Well

Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

0 posted 2003-05-23 05:46 AM

Listen to my coins
Tossed into the wishing well,
Soundlessly they fall
Then strike the muddy bottom,
For it has gone dry
And can grant nothing to me,
But my pouch is full
And I toss them in slowly
Knowing all wishing is gone.

Gloom

The Choka or Japanese Long poem in a Tanka Style
follows the format 5,7,5~(7,5)*n~,7,7 where the n is any number.
When the n=0 it is the classic Tanka,
No rhyme is needed, but the theme must be consistant.

QjQ
Member Elite

since 2003-04-18

Posts 3756
U.S.A.

1 posted 2003-05-23 06:12 AM

very interesting thanks for shareing

QjQ

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

2 posted 2003-05-25 01:01 AM

sad but beautiful

teledon
Member

since 2003-03-30

Posts 51
Florida USA

3 posted 2003-05-25 01:07 AM

Tanka you very much for a beautifully
wistful poem .. I am quite fond of the Japanee forms
don

"keep it simple"

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