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Joe Houck
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since 2001-04-23
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california

0 posted 2003-05-23 04:05 AM



I'M DRUNK AND Ii dont care what anyone thinks
Gin and tonic yes
I've had too many drinks
but I dont care
I do what i want
but is this right
to get drunk on a thursday night
I do not know
but i dont care
my mind is a basement now
without a stair
CHASE
what is my case
what is my problem
I do not care i do not care
just gimmi another round of booze
maybe the next round my pain will loose
and ill be free from myself that is weak
my future once vivid is now soo bleak
I wont sit here and feel sorry for myself
im haVING TOO MUCH FUNN being totally true
and never have i once had envyed you
untill now
i wish i saw through your view
I wish I had talents as golden as yours
i wish i was perfect to forfill yours
your dream
your perfect preceptions
on life and your methods
of how you react
to your daily triumph
i wish i was you
sted fast in your ways
know always your good
will outwiegh your bad days
i envy your thoughts
your manner your being
i wish i could see what your good heart was seeing
but i can't cuae im me
and that's all ill ever be
as long as i venture out
in this world without thee...
i miss you i love you
i and i know i can fix it all
but im too stupid to realize i just have to call
ring ring i summon you
out of the blue
to confess that the love we shared is still ever true
will i be smart
and take part in this mending
or will i be foolish and aid our love bending
no
no breaking my like it
cuaes without your love I feel acking from lack of your presants so near
i just want your breath to be upon me so near
i love you
im drunk and i know im noit making sence to anyone but me
but i have to say this for myself to at least see
for when im sobber ill read these words
and sayy hey i ment every word that i ment to say
even though i aid nothing atl all
i feel a have tapped a source ready too call
i love you kassie
but how can an angel be in love withj a devil
sent from hell to wreeck love ont an entirely
new level
your an agngel there is no dought about it
i should be so lucky to embrace your love
but im a fool and i cast you away
secretly hoping you'll come bake some day
i wish i hope i pray
youll for give me for acting this childish way
i love you kassie
till my dieing day


© Copyright 2003 Joe B. Houck - All Rights Reserved
passing shadows
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1 posted 2003-05-23 04:12 AM


hey Im'm with youou
Joe Houck
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since 2001-04-23
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california
2 posted 2003-05-23 04:14 AM


wow...i just read this........i and very over the legel lemit of liquir and of love all things i cant taste
ruin me quickley
take heed
make haste
im going to bed to wreap what i sow
im goin to go
and try to forget all this shihteo[hererptre..
byre


ThisDiamond
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3 posted 2003-05-23 09:29 AM


Hang in there Jo. TD
Earth Angel
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Realms of Light
4 posted 2003-05-23 09:43 AM


As you poured the gin and tonics in, you poured your heart and soul out...

Warm hugs,
EA

j-oh-E
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since 2003-05-01
Posts 59
Texas, USA
5 posted 2003-05-23 03:39 PM


I really liked reading your poem.  I hope it wasn't wrong that I laughed all through it.  Was it meant to be that way?  
Joe Houck
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since 2001-04-23
Posts 324
california
6 posted 2003-05-23 04:34 PM


I wrote this "poem"....in about 5 minutes flat and I didn't really know what I was
doing, but now that I read it back, yeah you could view this as comical or serious.  Picturing myself writing this and viewing all the obvious errors is pretty funny.  I think I was serious when I wrote it though.
I've never wrote anything really drunk before, it was weird.  this is a fairly long "poem" for me and I wrote it so fast because I just didn't care what it sounded like, I just wanted to get my scrambled thoughts down.
Thank you for reading my babble.
Joe =)


Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945
Texas, USA
7 posted 2003-05-23 05:06 PM


I think this stream of consciousness poured out of a bottle-It's kinda funny, kinda sad.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

Bill Charles
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8 posted 2003-05-23 08:32 PM


Joe - my favorite, gin and tonic, hic, hic...

BC

Midnitesun
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Gaia
9 posted 2003-05-24 11:11 PM


The Babblefish Interpreter helps sometimes. LOL, I enjoyed this Joe, and seriously?
I didn't evven have to go to the babblefish translator for any of it, and I'm glad the headache the next day was yours, not mine!

serenity blaze
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10 posted 2003-05-24 11:15 PM


water. aspirin. sleep.

and a hug.

(cute...but..wince, OUCH.)

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