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Open Poetry #26

Lack of Understanding

LastMoments
Member

since 2003-03-07

Posts 92

0 posted 2003-05-21 08:37 PM

The vision lit outside imbreached
It's so hard to understand
I can't lurk to find the pieces
I can't mend to make the puzzle

Daily viewing from the mirror
Branched out before my eyes
To paint the truth inside of me
And leave a stain forever molded

What has fallen out of place?
What's this pilgrimage of feeling?
I put my heart along the cross
To see it broken, nailed shut

I pinch my skin to know its real
My feeling breaks inside closure
This thought a splinter to my eyes
A swelling to my mind

As it seeps its final breaths
I feel faint inside
Everything is one big lie
No wonder I can't break the surface

No wonder I can't take the ground
And call it my last wounds.

JingleBear
Member

since 2003-05-08

Posts 76
Pennsylvania, USA

1 posted 2003-05-21 08:41 PM

Very intense wording. This puts very painful pictures in my mind, but it's a good poem!

QjQ
Member Elite

since 2003-04-18

Posts 3756
U.S.A.

2 posted 2003-05-21 08:42 PM

well written with thoughts

A thought from a stranger is cherished,
A thought from a friend is treasured

Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

3 posted 2003-05-21 08:46 PM

Nicely done, I too love the wording of
this poem. well done..

whiskey

Senior Member

since 1999-12-28

Posts 1278
Australia

4 posted 2003-05-21 09:02 PM

Well written poem, it made me feel sad as I read it that is the emotion that came over me

Julie

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