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Sipping Lemonade On A Warm Afternoon
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Sipping Lemonade On A Warm Afternoon |
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El_Campeador Senior Member
since 2003-01-29
Posts 761Ohio, USA |
Relaxing at the back porch Sipping at my lemonade; Dreaming dreams of how I wish My life could be arrayed I wish I was a poet Read by countless thousands Reaching out to touch the hearts Of those in distant lands I wish I could find someone Who will be more than my wife, But will be my closest friend For the remainder of my life I wish I could have several Of what Anne calls “bosom friends” Kindred spirits always near Those on whom I can depend As I took another sip I had a sudden thought— Life’s not life till we’re content With whatever it has brought! I’ve been blessed with many friends I have friends of all ages— From youngsters packed with fun To life’s time-produced sages And though I don’t have a wife I have been blessed even so, I have more brothers and sisters Than anyone else I know— And though I am not famous I have a gift in poetry, And I’d rather change one life Then have millions know of me… And then I have this blessing That I’m holding in my hand— Mmm! This is good lemonade! Yes, life is certainly grand! --- [This message has been edited by El_Campeador (05-22-2003 09:05 AM).] |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
*And I’d rather change one life Then have millions know of me… i really liked these lines, very nice write and read A thought from a stranger is cherished, |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Like this one, let me join in sipping some of that lemonade... Nicely done... |
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JingleBear Member
since 2003-05-08
Posts 76Pennsylvania, USA |
I'm glad you've found the wonderful things in life! |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
The secret of happiness is counting the blessings, not the daydreams. Sounds like you know that very well  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Dont ya just love Deers wisdom filled replies  this is a wonderful offering of sincere rhymes divine written by a wise poet. Well done!! So nice to have you back posting again.  I refuse to accept that mankind is so tragically bound to the starless midnight of racism & war that the daybreak of peace can never be reality. |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
E_C, ================= And though I am not famous I have a gift in poetry, And I’d rather change one life Then have millions know of me… ================= I didn't know there was so much wisdom in that lemonade. Gotta cup you can share? Very will written based an excellent theory of life. Love it. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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lost_star Member
since 2003-03-15
Posts 114NY, U.S.A |
A wonderful poem for a wonderful life. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
yes it is! |
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The Lonely Stranger Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 361Upstate, NY, USA |
I really liked this poem. I would have written ONE LITTLE line differently ... I would have written : "But will be my closest friend" "For the rest of my life" To be : "But will be my closest friend" "For the (balance or remainder) of my life" I'd do this just for the sake of meter (But I am no expert) Over all I really enjoyed it. Oh and one other note. You are on PASSIONS! I'd venture to guess that your poetry DOES touch thousands in many countries. ... There is no normal life Wyatt, just life ... so live! |
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El_Campeador Senior Member
since 2003-01-29
Posts 761Ohio, USA |
Thank you all for your replies... Keep living life and learning (it doesn't have to be over lemonade )Blessings, El Campeador P.S. Lonely Stranger, I like your suggestion for changing "rest" to "remainder". Since this poem was a little long, and I was quite busy yesterday, I didn't take as much time with the meter as I would have liked. Thanks for the help “We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Wow! Your words took me right there on the porch swing sipping lemonade as the warm Summer breeze brushed past my face. As you can see, I really enjoyed your poem Benjamin and you touched the heart of someone in a very distant land. Thank you for the beauty in your words. Take care......Sue I am in motion |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Yep...lemonade...James |
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