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jaysh
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since 2003-04-16

Posts 133
IL, USA

0 posted 2003-04-17 06:23 PM

"Puddle"
By: Janna Shaffer Age: 14

Looking in a puddle, oh what a see!
I can see the person, staring back at me,
Even through the mud, I am still there,
My reflection in the puddle, the wind in my hair.

How special is this puddle? Very much indeed,
It made me stop and think of things that I've never seen.
Even though its muddy, the beauty is within,
I look into the puddle, and see myself again.

I wake up in the morning, the sun is in my eyes,
I go outside to see it, my puddle it has dried,
I drop my head in sorrow, tears of being left alone,
Rolling down my face, a puddle of my own.

I view myself as muddy, but others think Im grand.
Like my special puddle, others think is muddy land.
One's self is like a puddle, to be found by someone new.
I look into your eyes, my puddles found by you.

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

1 posted 2003-04-17 06:25 PM

You know your writing is wise beyond your years!
Keep this up and you are going to go very far!
Amazing talent I see here.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

jaysh
Member

since 2003-04-16

Posts 133
IL, USA

2 posted 2003-04-17 10:16 PM

thank you so much, positive comments, and good influence keeps me writing, and this board is full of it

Justbleu
Member Elite

since 1999-08-31

Posts 3329
Oregon, Originally From Alaska :)

3 posted 2003-05-13 10:33 AM

This is a very good write....
Enjoyed!!!!
Bridgette

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown

Marilyn
Member Elite

since 1999-09-26

Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada

4 posted 2003-05-13 10:40 AM

14 hmmm. Well you have major potiential. If this is how you write now, I will not be surprised to see you in print in the future. Very well done.

Marilyn.

brezee
Member

since 2003-06-02

Posts 140

5 posted 2003-06-04 01:50 PM

"J" ur awesome girl! i wish i had as much creativity as you do! ur an awesome person and no matter how dumb he may be, i think bagel has helped you use ur imagination to great extent! keep writing girl!

~*~*brezee*~*~

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

6 posted 2003-06-04 01:54 PM

Oh, do I have a friend who knows all about puddles...

I'll bet, for you, she'll bring back a favorite for all...

Enjoyed this, and as Enchantress notes, you are far wiser than your 14 years...

Midnitesun