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Open Poetry #26

Displaced Hatred

JingleBear
Member

since 2003-05-08

Posts 76
Pennsylvania, USA

0 posted 2003-05-20 05:25 PM

My counterpart, my enemy
the one that stands beside me.

Everything done is done together,
without you I would surley fall forever.

Yet I dread having you,
dread all the occasions wasted on you.

I hate the way I must look at you,
and keep you content the whole way through.

Disgusting to feel your presence,
not wanting you to be my essence.

Cringing at your every mistake,
while longing you not wake.

The burden to be binded,
if another would not be minded.

Sickened as I plea,
but this other is me.

[This message has been edited by JingleBear (05-20-2003 05:47 PM).]

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

1 posted 2003-05-20 05:43 PM

Two sides to every story...
Interesting word play, and theme.
We all battle with ourselves at times, don't we? TD

S Arthur Grey
Senior Member

since 2001-03-19

Posts 719
woven by a poet's loom

2 posted 2003-05-20 05:44 PM

I certainly recognize this. I wrote something similar on this theme a very long time ago. It may be lost now.
In any case, it is a fit poetic topic and I'll venture that you will write more about it.
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(you might want to change "discusting" to "disgusting")
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S Arthur

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

3 posted 2003-05-20 05:44 PM

Very impressive, this must be the personification of your fears.
Love, Margherita

JingleBear
Member

since 2003-05-08

Posts 76
Pennsylvania, USA

4 posted 2003-05-20 07:14 PM

Thank you for your comments! Battling is an understatment, I have wars with myself!

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