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Open Poetry #26

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Kellie_Cantrell
Senior Member

since 2002-05-22

Posts 1667
New York

0 posted 2003-05-15 02:41 AM

                        A
                  cry          holding
               me                       Tight
            letting                          me
           hide           in the            twilight
         and that I cry deeply now, as sorrow
       cuts in, why now, why me? Do you love me?
      Time will only let us know, will you be here
       at the end? or will I have to look again,
         and see right through you and save
             myself from these tears that,
                 fall from my eye.

Love Always,

[This message has been edited by Kellie_Cantrell (05-15-2003 02:42 AM).]

Local Parasite

Member Elite

since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

1 posted 2003-05-15 09:17 AM

Oh cool... "a cry holding me."  I LOVE the irony of those opening few words.  Very, very creative.

Concrete poetry is hard to lay out, but you've done an alright job... I like your choice of words, and the style in which you wrote this...  you've done a nice job of describing that tear and all that it entails before it strikes the ground.

Nice work, Kellie.

Parasite

Poets are the unacknowledged legislators of the world.
~Percy Bysshe Shelley

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

2 posted 2003-05-16 06:17 PM

Very nice. Twilight IS the moment when tears flow easily.
Love, Margherita

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

3 posted 2003-05-16 06:46 PM

I agree with LP.
I enjoyed your words
and the style, Kellie.

Nicely done.
M

Kellie_Cantrell
Senior Member

since 2002-05-22

Posts 1667
New York

4 posted 2003-07-13 03:45 AM

Thank You all, it amazes me how the mind works and how words just flow from the brain and show exact emotion so well!

Love,
xXx~*KELLIE*~xXx
*My poetry website
http://www.freewebs.com/poettree/

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