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Open Poetry #26

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Adonis Cross
Junior Member

since 2003-04-07

Posts 46
Miami, FL, USA

0 posted 2003-05-13 10:47 AM

Alas, our souls will never blend as one—
I can’t believe my luck. He met you first,
But that alone won’t make me think I’m cursed—
It takes a lot to make me come undone,
So even though our souls will never blend
It’s not enough to want my life to end.

It isn’t too disheartening to know
That you and I will never be a pair—
There isn’t any torturous despair
Arising from that knowledge, even though
We could have been a perfect thing to see.
What kills me is the fact that you agree.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2003-05-13 10:51 AM

Ah, it's called "commitment" and "honor"...

Kind of nice, filling in the blank. Makes one think!

regards2you
Member Elite

since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

2 posted 2003-05-13 12:42 PM

I stand amazed there haven't been more relies to your poetry.... yet!....

I get so hung up on the form you use...half the time I forget what you said in the poem....which as first would seem simple enough, ha! Such talent you have.

I do however remember this...and the final line indeed touching.

Enjoyed greatly,

Hugs, Pat

Ani Zen
Junior Member

since 2003-05-08

Posts 12
Ottawa, Ontario, Canada

3 posted 2003-05-13 12:51 PM

This piece has a really nice feel to it...it flows wonderfully. Well done!

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

4 posted 2003-05-13 12:55 PM

Love's sad note, but well written.

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